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  • David Gerardino (8/25/2006 10:58:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    what comes first, bipoler or art, or both, i wonder how many poets on this sight write when it hitz, kinda like a push, or kick, good or bad, itz your ride, or some times rides, i call this THE FITZROY RIDE, IF YOUR ONE OF THEM, LET ME KNOW......

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    • Mary X (9/6/2006 11:48:00 AM) Post reply Stage

      This is an interesting post. Bipolar can BE art.

  • Lisa Marie Mcmillion-jones (8/6/2006 2:10:00 PM) Post reply | Read 3 replies Stage

    Hello again is this a confusion through your thoughts or is it and intelligent method of explaining your self then what is the problem? Can it be fixed and adjusted to suite everyone's taste in thoughts or is it just going to continue to be consider a race issue. Is the pattern considered jelousy or is it consider evey? What about your emotions that direct your thoughts so what is the psychical means of your intelligence that can be consider what may I ask or is it a riddle type of controls that adjust the thoughts of your personal emotional out puts as a selfish child or is it because you are wanting your own childish ways or is it not because you are racist? So why have you not shown for real the face in view of your own figure. My own music my own words of expressed vision. Is it a pattern of cycle that continue to ryme while others are just revealing not a thought for passion or is it because you have to be the way that you are? Can you get better and can others be left out of the picture or is that a secene again with a movie. Vision the thoughts of an inspired profound judgement that controls the movies in your thoughts or is it in my thought. Lisa

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    • Aldo Kraas (2/10/2007 9:04:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      I found this very confusing When I read it Some could thhink that you are insulting than Some may think that you think that others are racist? It is not a good poem sorry This doesn't sound to ... more

    • Kelly Gemmill (10/30/2006 11:44:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      this is a 'workshop' so i'm assuming you put this up to be commented on. I don't think this is a poem. It's not because it's written in prose form, either, because I've seen poems work that way. Th ... more

    • Radio Head (9/27/2006 6:35:00 AM) Post reply Stage

      I like this freestyle a lot. Very fluid thoughts that got me thinking.

  • Lisa Marie Mcmillion-jones (8/6/2006 2:00:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    So, I am different what of it and if that is not what I am stating then what about the black darkness of my skin through hispanic culture? Whom is the judger of my personal backgrounds any ways so are you god then whom are you and why do you care so much about my backgrounds that you control my life with religion. So whom is not knowing the true light of religion then. That can be what ever they are wanting to master in so whom gives you the right to be racist of a persons thoughts for their color of their skin? So, why do you exist within this life time and how come you have no color? Is it because that is what god say or is it because you were born that way, which is it your thoughts or mine throughout the disecions of whom may I ask? Lisa

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  • Lisa Marie Mcmillion-jones (8/6/2006 1:54:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    What is a thought that governs the ability to adjust to reasons of communications that don't show, but is just a blurred vision of expressed opinions that gather nothing but the amount of confusion that is not in existants with the ability to forsee the new days of views and thoughts that arrive for the views of most opinion when you are not present but keep visioning some other person in the mist. Lisa

  • Neil Gray (6/5/2006 5:07:00 PM) Post reply | Read 2 replies Stage

    Never understood why people feel the need to make poetry rhyme.
    Seems to restricting to me.
    But each to there own.
    For me free-form is the only way.

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    • Radio Head (9/27/2006 6:41:00 AM) Post reply Stage

      Its not a statement jessica, it's a poem. clever

    • Jessica Clark (6/29/2006 7:16:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      I absolutely agree. I find when I try to start rhyming in my work that I restrict the language I use as well as the imagery I am trying to convey. It seems tethering.

  • Blood Red Angel (5/11/2006 1:28:00 PM) Post reply | Read 3 replies Stage

    hey i just found this today and im new at writing free form

    its madness inside my mind
    its dark and i cant see the edge
    i dont know were to go
    or from where i came

    the pits of hell seem nice
    ive fallen over the edge
    into rambling
    i am insane lost and blundering
    everything is changing

    why do you look at me that way
    you all tend to stare
    and talk and whisper
    its madness the place i am in
    if you could see inside my mind
    if you could see the darkness
    that i created to escape the stares and haunting whispers
    with the evil glares you would run

    you would scream
    its madness
    in the darkness
    and its calling your name
    come and play
    with me inside the madness
    of this mind

    its taunting you the way you all have taunted me
    for the way i am
    you drove me to the darkness
    then came the madness
    and you wonder why i am that way
    now you know
    and its your turn

    the darkness is calling
    and its screaming your name

    by: blood red angel

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    • Jessica Clark (6/29/2006 7:24:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      This seems to portray the isolated emotional state that young adults can struggle with very well. Although some of the imagery was strong I found the narrator of the poem hard to finger- a homeless in ... more

    • Teresa Miggs (6/5/2006 8:19:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      I like it.

    • Mary-Elizabeth Conn (5/14/2006 4:02:00 AM) Post reply Stage

      That's really cool in a gothic/emo kinda way. :)

  • Heather Spaulding (4/21/2006 12:21:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    Hey, I'm new here, this is my first poem. Hope you like it.

    Let's depend on each other
    just like psychologists say not to
    you can be my
    cause and effect
    my deep affection
    pursuant persuasion
    my vital piece of

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    • Jessica Clark (6/29/2006 7:26:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      Oooooh. I like this. Very nice. The co-dependancy of strong affection and love. The healthy unhealthy. Fantastic.

  • stan pelfrey (4/12/2006 4:43:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    Hi everyone.
    I signed up here quite a while back and kinda forgot I did until recently, sorry. I really enjoy everyone's work on here, and look forward to, as I come by more regularly, getting to know some of you. *cheers*
    Thanks to everyone who has read and voted on my stuff,

  • Seshendra Sharma (2/24/2006 3:54:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    The dim darkness-the diffused light-dimness of one merging into the other-
    imparting more length to the long trees that are standing like stretched out
    shadows wearing stars in their hair- silence is imparting more depth to the darkness
    in this advaita where darkness is merged into silence, my mind wakes up,
    now not only sound but even a ray of light is a violent disturbance to the proundness
    of peace- in such moments deep truths unveil themselves-
    now I realise it is not sound but in silence melody lives-

    I am born out of flowers and silences- while passing my hand brushed against a flower,
    I asked 'are you bruised? ' 'Me or you' smiling, the flower questioned back- the heart
    of my pen broke and split blood; - I do not know which paper can bear this pen-

    In the gigantic silences of forests, which touch the blue skies, the carpenter bird pecks
    at the trunks of great trees which echo, far reaching sounds-
    what can he do among the tiny crotons?

    I ate days like fruits-now I eat drops of tears like grapes-frightened by the sun
    took refuge under shades-sitting on the pavement eating dreams from eyes like ice cream
    with spoons- measuring my life with dark evenings- I distributed my wealth
    once with metres, now I scatter with handfuls my future
    letting it fly in all directions-

    I washed my heart in tears and dried it over poetry- walked past
    wearing people on my body like shawls-
    in the assemblies of flames; in countries abroad I raised my gypsy voice
    and sang mixing earth and sky-
    this country is the graveyard of my genius- however fast I walk
    the distance remains the same. This land is thirsty for my blood,
    it is snoring in the little shades of pigmy trees-
    I picked my pen and dipped it in the sun
    to write a summer song for my nation-

    -Seshendra Sharma

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    • Aldo Kraas (2/10/2007 9:11:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      Congratulations Your poem is wonderful It is music to my years And it is joy to my heart

  • Max Reif (12/31/2005 8:25:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    (NY TIMES POETRY PAGE, December 31,2005)
    Op-Ed Contributors

    Published: December 31,2005

    The Beautiful Quickness of a Street Boy

    Yusef Komunyakaa

    Where did he come from, this boy
    pressing his face against the window
    of the car on that January afternoon
    in Burdwan? One of the three coins
    slips from my outstretched fingers
    & falls somewhere in the small car,
    & I contort my body to retrieve
    this touch of alloyed copper.
    Then, I look up at the boy
    pointing to the roses on the dashboard.
    Afternoon light falls between us.
    I hand him a rose, & he walks away
    with his nose pushed into the bloom,
    smiling to himself. In no time,
    the boy is facing a young man
    waiting on the platform.
    They exchange a few words.
    The man shoves a hand into his pocket
    & gives the boy a coin,
    & he dances away, leaving the man
    holding the flower behind his back.
    Our car fills with awe & laughter,
    & someone says, There’s a woman
    somewhere. That street boy,
    as if he sprung out of me,
    out of another time,
    is still pleading with everything
    he knows: his dusty clothes & eyes lit
    by Shiva, his half smile & black hair
    alive with lice, & his wounded song,
    as a bearded monkey paces
    the train station’s roof-spine.

    Yusef Komunyakaa is the author of “Taboo: Book One of the Wishbone Trilogy.”

    A Little Moonlight
    Carl Phillips

    Given inconstancy, the resistless
    affair that has been my body (as if
    there were no place to go from anywhere except
    deeper, into those spaces the hand makes by
    tugging the flesh, where it is part-able,
    more open, or as if I believed, utterly, what
    legend says about violation — how it leads
    to prophecy, the god enters the body, the mouth
    cracks open, and a mad fluttering, which
    is the future, fills the cave, which is
    desire, luck and hazard, hazard and luck) ,

    I should perhaps regret more. But it’s grown
    so late: see how dark, outside?

    Suspecting, even then,
    that the best way to avoid being
    broken by flaw would be to shape my life
    around it — flaw coming slowly
    to define the self, as shells make of the glass
    that holds them a little kingdom
    of sea — I followed him, and have only once
    looked back. Oh, I contain him

    as the lion’s chest contains the arrow
    that death displaces, effect always mattering
    more than cause: pull the arrow free —
    brandish it. By now it must weigh
    almost nothing...

    I agree, to hope for a thing is to believe in it,
    or at least to want to. When does belief
    become expectation? Like committing
    a crime, confessing to it, and thinking
    confession might equal apology, mistaking
    apology for to wipe clean away,
    you turn your face to me. — What?

    Trees in a wind. Their mixed
    invitation of leaves flourishing as if unstoppable,
    as if foliage were the greater part of it, the part
    I could love best, or should learn to say I do
    more often. Tell me why, when what I loved
    from the start was how eventually each leaf must go.

    Carl Phillips is the author of the forthcoming “Riding Westward.”

    In a Loaning
    Seamus Heaney

    Spoken for in autumn, recovered speech
    Having its way again, I gave a cry:
    “Not beechen green, but these shin-deep coffers
    Of copper-fired leaves, these beech boles grey.”

    Seamus Heaney, winner of the 1995 Nobel Prize in literature, is the author of the forthcoming “District and Circle.”

    Brigit Pegeen Kelly

    It was not a scorpion I asked for, I asked for a fish, but
    maybe God misheard my request, maybe God thought
    I said not “some sort of fish, ” but a “scorpion fish, ” a
    request he would surely have granted, being a goodly
    God, but then he forgot the “fish” attached to the
    “scorpion” (because God, too, forgets, everything
    forgets) : so instead of an edible fish, any small fish,
    sweet or sour, or even the grotesque buffoonery of the
    striped scorpion fish, crowned with spines and
    followed by many tails, a veritable sideshow of a fish;
    instead of these, I was given an insect, a peculiar
    prehistoric creature, part lobster, part spider, part
    bell-ringer, part son of a fallen star, something like a
    disfigured armored dog, not a thing you can eat, or
    even take on a meaningful walk, so ugly is it, so stiffly
    does it step, as if on ice, freezing again and again in
    mid-air like a listening ear, and then scuttling
    backwards or leaping madly forward, its deadly tail
    doing a St. Vitus jig. God gave me a scorpion, a
    venomous creature, to be sure, a bug with the bite of
    Cleopatra’s asp, but not, as I soon found out, despite
    the dark gossip, a lover of violence or a hater of men.
    In truth, it is shy, the scorpion, a creature with eight
    eyes and almost no sight, who shuns the daylight, and
    is driven mad by fire, who favors the lonely spot, and
    feeds on nothing much, and only throws out its poison
    barb when backed against a wall — a thing like me,
    but not the thing I asked for, a thing, by accident or
    design, I am now attached to. And so I draw the
    curtains, and so I lay out strange dishes, and so I step
    softly, and so I do not speak, and only twice, in many
    years, have I been stung, both times because,
    unthinking, I let in the terrible light. And sometimes
    now, when I watch the scorpion sleep, I see how fine he
    is, how rare, this creature called Lung Book or Mortal
    Book because of his strange organs of breath. His
    lungs are holes in his body, which open and close. And
    inside the holes are stiffened membranes, arranged
    like the pages of a book — imagine that! And when the
    holes open, the pages rise up and unfold, and the blood
    that circles through them touches the air, and by this
    bath of air the blood is made pure... He is a house of
    books, my shy scorpion, carrying in his belly all the
    perishable manuscripts — a little mirror of the library
    at Alexandria, which burned.

    Brigit Pegeen Kelly is the author, most recently, of “Orchard.”

    The Waterclock and the Hourglass
    Brad Leithauser

    An old pair of parents, it appears,
    In an old museum case... He unites
    Form and function, plainly; she’s a thing
    Of fancy and flourish, and is — for all her years —
    Exceptionally pretty.

    He springs from Cathay, land of whispering
    Bamboo and gently rain-wrung skies;
    She’s of Venice, a flowing city
    From whose brisk ovens
    Glowing loaves of glass rise.

    A mixed marriage, then, but by all lights
    A happy one (differences reconciled —
    They’ve learned to take things day by day) ,
    Save that their only, problem child
    Keeps running away.

    Brad Leithauser is the author of “Darlington’s Fall, ” a novel in verse.

    Sarah Arvio

    I was what mattered in the end. Or if
    I didn’t matter then nothing mattered,
    and if I mattered, well then all things did.

    O miracles and molecules, dust, rust.
    It was always a matter of matter.
    It might be meat or else it might be love

    (if I was meat, if I was fit to eat) .
    What had never been matter would never
    matter: you might say this was a moot point.

    Clay and dust, ash and mud and mist and rust,
    blood-orange sunsets and turning maples,
    apples and cherries, sticks and trash and dust,

    rumpled papers blowing across a street
    (dead letters sent to him that lives away) .
    There was life, there was loss, there was no such

    thing as loss — there was nothing that wasn’t
    both life and loss. No, it had to be said,
    in questions of matter, nothing was lost.

    It might be a matter of carnal love.
    This was textual and material,
    and for once the facts-of-the-matter were

    both heartfelt and matter-of-fact. (Oh,
    matter of course was always the mother.)
    These were the facts of life, this was my life,

    and there I was, right at the heart of it,
    my own heart — at the heart-of-the-matter.
    And did I matter now or in the end?

    O mother, maintainer and measurer,
    mud and fruit of the heart, meat of the heart,
    the question might be asked, what was the end.

    Sarah Arvio is the author of the forthcoming “Sono.”

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    • Lori Boulard (1/2/2006 9:41:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      Thank you, Max, thank you for providing something actually worth reading before I give up and turn in for the night. You know of my recent frustrations; I ventured into this forum for the first time ... more

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