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  • Rookie Matty Reynolds (6/23/2012 2:25:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply
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    I know I am but summer to your heart,
    And not the four seasons of the year.
    And you welcome love from another
    Whose noble moods are not as mine.
    I have no pretentious weight of age,
    Nor easy spring breeze to give you.
    I am all monsoons and thunderstorms,
    Hot wind, hard gusts, cold rain.
    I am not any wise and wintry thing;
    And I have loved you all too long and well
    To carry still the high sweet breast of spring.
    So love me year round as you loved
    Me on the bed where summer
    Rose to meet our naked skin,
    Sticky from sweat and making love.

    But spring is here, in its budding silence,
    I must be gone, steal forth with silent drums,
    That you may rise refreshed with
    The call of the sea gull and
    Scent of the rose, and
    The weight of his arms upon your
    Hips and breasts.

    Will you come back to me, as summer comes?Or softer yet
    As it ends and the death of leaves
    Begins again; to feel the crunch of
    Them upon your back on an
    Indian summer day in a clearing...
    Or will you at that sweetest of times
    Choose to bask your naked flesh
    Upon other shores, other climes?

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  • Rookie Marilyn George (6/20/2012 12:52:00 PM) Post reply

    Hello all, please take some time to read my 'Nine men fall' and leave a comment on your thoughts - thank you greatly :)

  • Rookie Juan Guzman (6/19/2012 8:04:00 PM) Post reply

    Please visit my profile and comment on one of my poems, thank you very much.

  • Rookie Alexis ... (6/18/2012 8:32:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    Hi everyone I would like to have you comment on my poems....ironically it is really hard to. Please let me know what you think, and please visit my page and read and comment on the other thanks

    Ascension

    Deadened are my lively days
    When simple was a word I didn't know
    I stepped with high-heels onto a moonlit street
    And without a sound feel a rhythm
    I could feel any beat
    Out of my own volition

    I would dance down endless roads
    As they stared
    The passersby
    And jealous were the stars of my candescence
    Although they glowed
    But I was luminescent

    I would dance through towns and cities
    Not knowing I'd gone miles
    But that cars were far behind in speed
    They slowed around curves
    But there was no break in me

    I had come to a sea
    And effortlessly I did transcend
    Now feeling I am free
    Leaving endless streets behind
    That held no space for me

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  • Rookie - 43 Points Portia Lane (6/1/2012 6:49:00 PM) Post reply

    Please read this poem and let me know what you think. I wanted to focus on alliteration... did I over do it??Any other comments/suggestions?

    A poet’s plight

    I have here my pen and pad
    And now I plan to prove my genius

    If I can only get this stupid pen to work

    I will use mesmerizing metaphors
    And beyond brilliant similes
    I will compare things never compared before
    I will give words new meanings

    If I can only get this stupid pen to work

    I will stitch my story one scene at a time
    Decoratively divulging distinct memories
    I will quaintly quilt what is on my mind
    Even reluctantly memorializing past misery

    If I can only get this stupid pen to work

    I will tell tales never told before
    In ways no one has ever heard before
    I will leave my listener wanting more
    Each stanza sending them through another door

    If I can only get this stupid pen to work

    I will cunningly construct a new poetic form
    Into which rhythm and rhyme will swarm
    Into which even prominent poets will storm
    For it will transcend traditional norms


    If I can only get this stupid pen to write!

    Ugh! I give up! !

    This is a despairing dilemma I have disdainfully endured
    A wicked war waged against me without forewarning

    This
    Is another example
    Of a Poet’s
    Plight

  • Rookie - 43 Points Portia Lane (6/1/2012 6:32:00 PM) Post reply

    Please read this poem and let me know what you think. I wanted to focus on alliteration... did I over do it??Any other comments/suggestions?

    A poet’s plight

    I have here my pen and pad
    And now I plan to prove my genius

    If I can only get this stupid pen to work

    I will use mesmerizing metaphors
    And beyond brilliant similes
    I will compare things never compared before
    I will give words new meanings

    If I can only get this stupid pen to work

    I will stitch my story one scene at a time
    Decoratively divulging distinct memories
    I will quaintly quilt what is on my mind
    Even reluctantly memorializing past misery

    If I can only get this stupid pen to work

    I will tell tales never told before
    In ways no one has ever heard before
    I will leave my listener wanting more
    Each stanza sending them through another door

    If I can only get this stupid pen to work

    I will cunningly construct a new poetic form
    Into which rhythm and rhyme will swarm
    Into which even prominent poets will storm
    For it will transcend traditional norms


    If I can only get this stupid pen to write!

    Ugh! I give up! !

    This is a despairing dilemma I have disdainfully endured
    A wicked war waged against me without forewarning

    This
    Is another example
    Of a Poet’s
    Plight

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  • Rookie - 0 Points John Hazon Palen (5/3/2012 8:33:00 PM) Post reply

    Whatever you may call this, just know that this came from my heart:

    I love poemhunter.com! I thank all the people behind this website for the support they've given to me since I joined in. This encourages me in a lot of ways as I also am taking a degree in BS InfoTech, lucky enough being a gov't scholar to help my family. I am looking forward in the future about working for such wonderful website. I hope it will be as sooner as possible for I want to get my mom to the hospital to get checked up because she now suffers from an illness which really does bother me. If only I can treat her and take away the pain by myself, I wouldn't take the risk of putting my reputation low. I need someone who can help me all for the love of my family. I have my dreams in life and it includes for all the members of my family, especially my dear parents. Out of all the things in life that I could fear, the only thing that would hurt me is if I'd loose someone I love!

  • Rookie M.L Bennett (4/15/2012 12:37:00 AM) Post reply

    What's the difference in posting on our page and posting here?I didn't sit down and analyze and diagram any of my ideas... make out some scientific formula for how they should be written out, if that's really how poets usually write. If that's the case, then maybe I'm the only one who should ever read what I write.

  • Rookie - 0 Points Sky Welch (4/12/2012 3:15:00 PM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

    Sonnet 1: Secrets and death coincide!
    For sooth! O secrets that keep life a drift
    Livens death which brings pain to all of life
    What secrecy that gives but hath no gift
    Secrets to lies that make life full of strife
    But man will cause pain upon the trusting
    When truth be revealed pain shall rein through out
    Secrets have no truth and death no sting
    And animals have no secrets or doubt
    Hidden from the world are conspiracies
    Hidden by those who do great deeds
    But fools they are to force tendencies
    And make the lies that's to fester and feeds
    Secrets lead to lies of death in the night
    Death, secrets, lies give the world quite a fright.

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    • Rookie - 0 Points Gabhriel Londe (6/28/2012 2:45:00 PM) Post reply

      I thought this was the freeform forum??

    • Rookie - 0 Points M.L Bennett (4/15/2012 12:40:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

      Sky, this is very insightful and you have a wonderful handle on vocabulary. I honestly enjoyed pondering the meaning behind your words and interpreting what it meant to me.

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