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  • Rookie - 0 Points Austin Straussfield (10/6/2012 6:50:00 AM) Post reply | Read 2 replies
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    Check this out...i'm kinda new here and will be needing guide from the experienced one...please i want you all to comment on this
    " I never knew i could fly
    until i see you cry
    Patiently waiting for your smile
    but it's way long along the tide
    you make me walk the mile
    even though its for a while
    i never knew i could fly
    until i see me try..."

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    • Rookie - 0 Points Gulsher John (10/17/2012 6:30:00 AM) Post reply

      great, but don`t confine your feelings to just rhyming, use free verse or blank verse,

    • Rookie - 0 Points Okoronkwo Jackson Jonathan (10/8/2012 2:40:00 PM) Post reply

      I love your portrayed idea but you have to synchronize your lines to allow a free flow and sensational link. Add meaning I mean. Check the first two lines.

  • Rookie B. V. Dahlen (10/5/2012 8:10:00 AM) Post reply

    Writing in rhyme and meter takes discipline. Trying to capture complex ideas while confined to structure can stifle some people. I find that searching for the " perfect" word to balance my line sometimes leads me to an even better expression of my thoughts. Please read and comment on some of my poems and let me know what you think. Thanks. Bea (B. V. Dahlen)

  • Rookie Saundra Blaylock (9/21/2012 8:33:00 AM) Post reply | Read 3 replies

    Reflection

    Can you see your reflection through my eyes.
    Covered in glitter and drowning in lies.

    Are you staring back at an image you’ve come to despise
    All that poison has left you broken and unwise.

    Hiding behind a facade, nothing is as it seems.
    Lost in an illusion and caught up in a dream.

    Blinded by the haze of your own destruction.
    In the wake of a bitter seduction.

    Will your eyes be forever wide shut,
    Hiding behind all that smoke and smut?

    What happens when you finally fall to your knees
    And there is no one to answer your pleas?

    When will you be able to look into her eyes,
    Free and totally stripped of your disguise?

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    • Rookie Okoronkwo Jackson Jonathan (10/8/2012 2:27:00 PM) Post reply

      Hmmm! Wonderful write. Great work. I love all the lines.

    • Rookie Sheila Freecs (10/5/2012 3:07:00 AM) Post reply

      wow! ! you are awesome.. you're great.. i just wonder who is your inspiration =))

    • Rookie Alexis ... (9/25/2012 11:08:00 AM) Post reply

      Saundra, this poem is cleverly written " Hiding behind a facade, nothing is as it seems. Lost in an illusion and caught up in a dream. " I love these two lines especially. Great write!

  • Rookie Daniel Einstein (9/19/2012 8:25:00 PM) Post reply

    Hello there guys and gals, Well, i am not looking for people to comment on my Poems, no sir, i would like for all of you out there to Give me your name and Favorite poems, and i will Comment and like them depends on their awesomeness, Don't be afraid and Message me your Favorite poems, Good day.

  • Rookie Chettur Aishwarya Shrivastav (8/10/2012 11:17:00 AM) Post reply

    http://www.poemhunter.com/chettur-aishwarya-shrivastav/

  • Rookie Garrett Richardson (8/8/2012 6:28:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    Please tell me what you think, and of ways to improve my poems. Thank You.

    Song of Life-
    My dependency on your resplendency
    Has brought my once thought fiction
    Into reality
    Crowning you as my new addiction
    Listen closely now to the steadfast sound
    You have my heart pounding out loud
    Do with it as you must
    Only to you will I entrust
    This muscle that allows you to behold my presence
    For it is the living essence
    Of my love to you my dearest
    So as long as you can hear it
    The day will never come
    When our lustful feelings grow numb
    Together our beating hearts compose the beat
    To our song that remains unsung
    We together can live our lives
    And in the process form our paradise
    Now with every step forward we take
    We will begin to create
    A song from our hearts
    Filled only with the perfect words
    The three words that ring true
    More so than others do
    I love you.

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    • Rookie Okoronkwo Jackson Jonathan (10/8/2012 2:34:00 PM) Post reply

      Hali halo Mr Garrett. If I tell you that your poem is wonderful and great, hope you won't mind. Now do me a favor. Keep on writing and read more. Never allow these things to lack beside you; your dict ... more

  • Rookie - 431 Points Adam M. Snow (8/4/2012 7:57:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    ****Please Comment****

    Ladylove

    There once was a lady by the name of Ladylove,
    who was said to be a saint sent from above.
    But no one knew just who she was;
    a ghost indeed was she, was she.
    She approached a swain one day, one sorrowful day;
    stealing his heart as she ran away.

    She left with a flutter in a moonlit still,
    her beauty graces her for a splendid time.
    She haste to a pond of midnight glow,
    a lad soon followed as he watched her go.
    She looked in his eyes with sadness there,
    looking away as she's engulfed in light.

    She step a foot in glistening water still,
    meandering a swan not by will.
    The boy he haste to grasp her hand,
    letting his love guide as they shift to swans;
    he a swan of black and she white,
    they soar now into the ever moonlight.
    The story now told of a love everlasting,
    of two young swans, on moonlit casting.

    -Adam M. Snow

    If you like this poem, please check out any of my other poems

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    • Rookie - 431 Points Lamis Fahal . (9/5/2012 2:07:00 PM) Post reply

      Awwwww, I really loved it! Vivid imagination that made drift away Great job! ! !

  • Rookie - 15 Points Naseeru Taneemu Annuree (7/29/2012 9:25:00 PM) Post reply

    Hello dear fellow poets! I invite you to read my poem tittle " social love" . Kindly honour the invitation. Thanks.

  • Rookie - 431 Points Adam M. Snow (7/27/2012 4:47:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    ****Please Comment****

    Through the Eyes of the Untold Lore

    Through these stained eyes, dark is all I see
    yet I try to live, believing this is me.
    But all I could do is place my heart on a page,
    and watch it rot away with every age.

    All I am through your eyes is a ghost,
    whom you don't dare miss the most.
    All you are through my eyes, is hopelessness;
    but my words I write are my distress.

    Peaking through my once soulless muse,
    as my heart lies victim to your solemn abuse.
    I live to be your puppet, nothing more
    but I am a writer of many lore.

    And as I dare write with missing heart,
    it is with you whom my stories start.

    -Adam M. Snow

    If you like this poem, please check out any of my other poems

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  • Rookie - 11 Points Darren David Weaver (7/16/2012 6:07:00 PM) Post reply

    Hi, please spend a few few minutes looking at some of my poems and any feedback you leave will be appreciated - there are few rhyming poems! Thankyou for your time.

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