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  • Robert Winthrop (5/6/2012 12:03:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    I wrote this song recently and my friend wrote the music. We gave it to a friend who is with the Grand Ol' Opry and we hope it will be recorded.

    Awesome

    Aw! Somebody made you sad and blue.

    Aw! Someone has made a fool of you.

    Aw! Some thing he said was so unkind.

    Aw! Sometimes he played tricks with your mind.


    Aw! Somehow he got you off your track.

    Aw! Some days you know he won’t come back.

    Aw! Some way you’ll get back on your feet.

    Aw! Sometime your life will be complete.


    Though today the skies are gray and dark.

    And you feel you’ll never find your mark,

    Rise up tall and smile a great big smile.

    Laugh, the sun will shine in just awhile.


    Aw! Somewhere somebody waits for you.

    Aw! Somebody’s heart is broken too.

    Aw! Someone will come because he saw some

    Awesome things in you. You’re awesome.

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  • Bernard Eseo (5/6/2012 4:24:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    I May Not Be


    I May Not Be by Bernard Eseo

    I may not be a singer
    But I’ll sing a thousand times a day
    I may not be writer
    But I’ll write for you without any pay

    I may not be a dancer
    But my actions will express my love
    I may not be an athlete
    But I’ll play by the rules of up above

    I may not be a superhero
    But I’ll save you with a smile
    I may not be a debater
    But I’ll be there within a dial.

    I may not be your Prince Charming
    But I’ll be there to what I can
    I may not always be with you
    But I promise, I’m your number one fan


    - Hope you guys can critique on my poems and this one! Thanks! Appreciated. ;)

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  • John Hazon Palen (5/3/2012 8:32:00 PM) Post reply

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  • Yasir Khan Niazi (5/3/2012 11:36:00 AM) Post reply

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  • Godfrey Morris (5/2/2012 8:45:00 AM) Post reply

    My dear friends, your critique on my poems are well desired and appreciated

  • Joshua Crumpton (4/22/2012 9:02:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    The Mirror
    As I gaze at the mirror that hangs, what is this that I see.
    As I stare, I wonder how this person looking back is who I've come to be.

    I look into those eyes, in which seem to only behold sadness.
    Lonely no matter where I turn, and can't seem to escape this madness.

    If I were to look into that heart, and through my very soul,
    I would find a world of emptiness and pain that I can't seem to control.

    Yet I don't move, and can't see, it's like in darkness I feel blind.
    Why do I continue to stare at this mirror, what is it that I hope to find?

    There is a dark side of the mirror, in which I'm afraid to say,
    Feeling like a demon from hell cast out to play.

    That's the part that does evil and idiotic things,
    No matter what happens and what it brings.

    I try to keep it in, something I must get rid of or atleast hide.
    But I can't bury it, because still it's lurking deep down inside.

    As I look upon this mirror, I see so much anger and pain.
    I've tried to hide it, but no matter what the mirror still remains.

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  • jas Cagz (4/10/2012 12:38:00 PM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

    [DARLING] I want to be with you when you walk the dog,

    Check out rainbow's on a broken log,

    I'm sad when you say I'm walking along the beach,

    I hold out my hand but your out of reach,

    When I hear your voice I close my eye's,

    Pretend I'm there and shout surprize,

    I want to smell you everyday,

    Love and kiss you in everyway,

    I'd hold you close and yes you know,

    I'd never ever let you go.

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    • Robert Winthrop (5/6/2012 12:08:00 PM) Post reply

      Nice poem. However, check spelling " you're out of reach, " every way-two words, surprise with an s, hold you close and, yes, you know.

    • Ralph The Elf (4/22/2012 3:07:00 AM) Post reply

      if this is real then let her know you only lose if you don't show your love and care and for the maiden that makes you feel like a baby

  • Danjosh Zeus (4/7/2012 6:02:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    guyz plss do read the " ODE" that i have written and dropp some comments...thanks! ! !

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    • Danjosh Zeus (4/7/2012 6:03:00 AM) Post reply

      just go to my page and read my poem entitled " Ode To The Moon"

  • Ma.Emmariz Valmorida (3/23/2012 7:47:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    I have written a poem from my own experiences in life, rhyming base from the situation itself that flows from the poem. Please try to read and give some comments Thanks

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  • Aftab Alam Khursheed (3/22/2012 1:03:00 PM) Post reply

    Ki bonking is not necessary, read my poem and yourself from the world

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