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  • Yasir Khan Niazi (5/3/2012 11:36:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    hiiii...

  • Godfrey Morris (5/2/2012 8:45:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    My dear friends, your critique on my poems are well desired and appreciated

  • Joshua Crumpton (4/22/2012 9:02:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    The Mirror
    As I gaze at the mirror that hangs, what is this that I see.
    As I stare, I wonder how this person looking back is who I've come to be.

    I look into those eyes, in which seem to only behold sadness.
    Lonely no matter where I turn, and can't seem to escape this madness.

    If I were to look into that heart, and through my very soul,
    I would find a world of emptiness and pain that I can't seem to control.

    Yet I don't move, and can't see, it's like in darkness I feel blind.
    Why do I continue to stare at this mirror, what is it that I hope to find?

    There is a dark side of the mirror, in which I'm afraid to say,
    Feeling like a demon from hell cast out to play.

    That's the part that does evil and idiotic things,
    No matter what happens and what it brings.

    I try to keep it in, something I must get rid of or atleast hide.
    But I can't bury it, because still it's lurking deep down inside.

    As I look upon this mirror, I see so much anger and pain.
    I've tried to hide it, but no matter what the mirror still remains.

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  • jas Cagz (4/10/2012 12:38:00 PM) Post reply | Read 2 replies Stage

    [DARLING] I want to be with you when you walk the dog,

    Check out rainbow's on a broken log,

    I'm sad when you say I'm walking along the beach,

    I hold out my hand but your out of reach,

    When I hear your voice I close my eye's,

    Pretend I'm there and shout surprize,

    I want to smell you everyday,

    Love and kiss you in everyway,

    I'd hold you close and yes you know,

    I'd never ever let you go.

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    • Robert Winthrop (5/6/2012 12:08:00 PM) Post reply Stage

      Nice poem. However, check spelling " you're out of reach, " every way-two words, surprise with an s, hold you close and, yes, you know.

    • Ralph The Elf (4/22/2012 3:07:00 AM) Post reply Stage

      if this is real then let her know you only lose if you don't show your love and care and for the maiden that makes you feel like a baby

  • Danjosh Zeus (4/7/2012 6:02:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    guyz plss do read the " ODE" that i have written and dropp some comments...thanks! ! !

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    • Danjosh Zeus (4/7/2012 6:03:00 AM) Post reply Stage

      just go to my page and read my poem entitled " Ode To The Moon"

  • Ma.Emmariz Valmorida (3/23/2012 7:47:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply Stage

    I have written a poem from my own experiences in life, rhyming base from the situation itself that flows from the poem. Please try to read and give some comments Thanks

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  • Aftab Alam Khursheed (3/22/2012 1:03:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    Ki bonking is not necessary, read my poem and yourself from the world

  • Aftab Alam Khursheed (3/22/2012 1:03:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    Ki bonking is not necessary, read my poem and yourself from the world

  • Anujan Raja (3/21/2012 9:45:00 PM) Post reply Stage

    Invite everybody to read my poems (several times, please)
    Make comments- what you felt when you read them.
    Don' bother about backgrounds.
    Don' bother about ways of stereotyped criticism.

  • Rayna Loh (3/21/2012 10:21:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    I have written a rhyming poem based on the 8 planets of our Solar System. Please rate it! Thanks!

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