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  • jas Cagz (4/10/2012 12:38:00 PM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

    [DARLING] I want to be with you when you walk the dog,

    Check out rainbow's on a broken log,

    I'm sad when you say I'm walking along the beach,

    I hold out my hand but your out of reach,

    When I hear your voice I close my eye's,

    Pretend I'm there and shout surprize,

    I want to smell you everyday,

    Love and kiss you in everyway,

    I'd hold you close and yes you know,

    I'd never ever let you go.

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    • Robert Winthrop (5/6/2012 12:08:00 PM) Post reply

      Nice poem. However, check spelling " you're out of reach, " every way-two words, surprise with an s, hold you close and, yes, you know.

    • Ralph The Elf (4/22/2012 3:07:00 AM) Post reply

      if this is real then let her know you only lose if you don't show your love and care and for the maiden that makes you feel like a baby

  • Danjosh Zeus (4/7/2012 6:02:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    guyz plss do read the " ODE" that i have written and dropp some comments...thanks! ! !

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    • Danjosh Zeus (4/7/2012 6:03:00 AM) Post reply

      just go to my page and read my poem entitled " Ode To The Moon"

  • Ma.Emmariz Valmorida (3/23/2012 7:47:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    I have written a poem from my own experiences in life, rhyming base from the situation itself that flows from the poem. Please try to read and give some comments Thanks

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  • Aftab Alam Khursheed Silver Star - 5th Stage (3/22/2012 1:03:00 PM) Post reply

    Ki bonking is not necessary, read my poem and yourself from the world

  • Aftab Alam Khursheed Silver Star - 5th Stage (3/22/2012 1:03:00 PM) Post reply

    Ki bonking is not necessary, read my poem and yourself from the world

  • Anujan Raja Rookie - 1st Stage (3/21/2012 9:45:00 PM) Post reply

    Invite everybody to read my poems (several times, please)
    Make comments- what you felt when you read them.
    Don' bother about backgrounds.
    Don' bother about ways of stereotyped criticism.

  • Rayna Loh Rookie - 1st Stage (3/21/2012 10:21:00 AM) Post reply

    I have written a rhyming poem based on the 8 planets of our Solar System. Please rate it! Thanks!

  • Robert Winthrop Rookie - 1st Stage (3/18/2012 8:37:00 PM) Post reply

    Take a look at my poems. They are sort of traditional in meter and rhyme and are mostly about growing up in a small town on the Mississippi.

  • Ben Clark Rookie - 1st Stage (2/24/2012 10:02:00 PM) Post reply

    This is terrible.

  • Hezekiah Iliya Rookie - 1st Stage (2/24/2012 7:23:00 AM) Post reply

    If life was a tape, let me watch all over again.come read my poems and let me get ur say on them

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