Rhythm and Rhyme Workshop

Hello everyone. My name is Greenwolfe 1962. This is the first time that
I have ever come to this workshop for obvious reasons. I am a very busy person these days and I don't have time to help everyone who asks me to help
them one on one. Therefore, I decided to put up this posting for those of
you who are here. I thought that if I just came here and answered a few
questions from time to time, that I could help more people more efficiently.
So, my question is this for everyone here who would like to comment.
I would like you to tell me whether you think I should come here from time to
time to answer your questions. If you don't think I should or that I have no business here then say so.I'm not going to waste my time in a place I should not be. I leave this entirely up to those of you who respond to this posting. I will return in about two weeks to read your comments and come
to a decision. If it is yes, then I will visit this forum once a week to
answer the questions you posted. Thank you for your attention.

Greenwolfe 1962

at times i wonder, whether poetry is spontaneous expression of feelings or we should follow the classical structural forms for writing more effectively. free verse is more in vogue these days.i have expressed tis in my poem Poems and POETRY.

Hi everyone! !
I'm new here and I would like you to check out my poems. I haven't got many, so you can read them all. I hope you like them and write your comments.
Thanks again,
Shushan

In relation to rhythm I read a very article the other day in a theatre journal. I forget it's name to be honest but it was discussing the performance of Shakespeare and the intracacies of speaking his text. Because I'm an actor it was very interesting but it also had some pertinent things to say about the written word. One of the points is that though we don't realise it, much of our everyday speech patterns fall into the rhythm of iambic, which is of course Shakespeare's adopted rhythmical pattern. It got me thinking thought, almost everything I write falls into iambics. Has anyone here tried a different rhythm, Trochaic for example. Any thoughts?

hi all, was hoping that if u have the time you could check out my poems especially my new one that i posted today called 'When you round me' and leave a comment would be gratefull also comment on any other poems if u wish to do so would love the feedback thanks for your time.

kaspa

'Rocking: back and fro.'

Sits she in her rocking chair-
Rocking: back and fro.
Smiling with her pins and thread-
For knitting, Love does know.

But he does slouch upon a porch:
Spitting out chewed seeds;
Bleeding from his ragged heart.
For Love's what Sadness needs.

Kyle S. Hamp

helpful criticism?

i've 2 new poems.
'Division' and 'Strange, She'.
review...
go. go.

Fallen Angel

Demon of the day, Angel of the night
He is torn between darkness and the light
The path he walks, he walks alone
He travels around, for which he has no home

People fear him as he passes by
He trusts no one, his life was a lie
He walks in an unbearable shame
As he remembers his unforgetable name

His bleeding heart is freezing over
As he watches the eternal night grow older
Wanting his immortal soul to end
As he watches the Northern Lights start to blend

Dream Lover

Do I haunt your dreams at night,
do they include me?
Am I in your sleep my dear,
do you think of me?

As the night goes by,
and the hours creep.
Are there thoughts of you and I,
and the love I keep?

When the night is over,
and the day begins.
Am I still with you my dear,
or does our love end?

All throughout the day,
as the time goes by,
does your mind begin to wander,
to thoughts of you and I?

Now when the day is over,
and the night begins.
Do I invade your dreams again
until the dawn begins?

Am I just a dream my dear,
are your thoughts of me,
trapped inside your mind
for only the night to see?

I think that if there was a standard for writing poetry it would sound structured. Poetry is not trial and error. Poetry is trial after trial. No one can tell you if it's 'wrong'. Poetry comes from your heart@@