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  • Rookie Shushan Artinian (8/22/2008 9:59:00 AM) Post reply
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    Hi everyone! !
    I'm new here and I would like you to check out my poems. I haven't got many, so you can read them all. I hope you like them and write your comments.
    Thanks again,
    Shushan

  • Rookie Mathew Lewis (8/4/2008 10:53:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    In relation to rhythm I read a very article the other day in a theatre journal. I forget it's name to be honest but it was discussing the performance of Shakespeare and the intracacies of speaking his text. Because I'm an actor it was very interesting but it also had some pertinent things to say about the written word. One of the points is that though we don't realise it, much of our everyday speech patterns fall into the rhythm of iambic, which is of course Shakespeare's adopted rhythmical pattern. It got me thinking thought, almost everything I write falls into iambics. Has anyone here tried a different rhythm, Trochaic for example. Any thoughts?

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    • Rookie Fay Slimm (8/7/2008 11:46:00 PM) Post reply

      Hi Mathew. Interesting your points on the constant use of iambic rhythm, it often seems that way in everyday speech. I try to use trochaic in my verse as it has a more feminine flavour and reads light ... more

  • Rookie Kaspa Richards (8/3/2008 5:03:00 PM) Post reply

    hi all, was hoping that if u have the time you could check out my poems especially my new one that i posted today called 'When you round me' and leave a comment would be gratefull also comment on any other poems if u wish to do so would love the feedback thanks for your time.

    kaspa

  • Rookie - 4 Points Kyle Hamp (6/30/2008 5:58:00 PM) Post reply

    'Rocking: back and fro.'

    Sits she in her rocking chair-
    Rocking: back and fro.
    Smiling with her pins and thread-
    For knitting, Love does know.

    But he does slouch upon a porch:
    Spitting out chewed seeds;
    Bleeding from his ragged heart.
    For Love's what Sadness needs.

    Kyle S. Hamp

    helpful criticism?

  • Rookie - 4 Points Kyle Hamp (6/25/2008 12:31:00 PM) Post reply

    i've 2 new poems.
    'Division' and 'Strange, She'.
    review...
    go. go.

  • Rookie - 0 Points Katherine Sessor (6/24/2008 5:30:00 PM) Post reply

    Fallen Angel

    Demon of the day, Angel of the night
    He is torn between darkness and the light
    The path he walks, he walks alone
    He travels around, for which he has no home

    People fear him as he passes by
    He trusts no one, his life was a lie
    He walks in an unbearable shame
    As he remembers his unforgetable name

    His bleeding heart is freezing over
    As he watches the eternal night grow older
    Wanting his immortal soul to end
    As he watches the Northern Lights start to blend

  • Rookie Greg Chartrand (6/17/2008 11:07:00 AM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

    Dream Lover

    Do I haunt your dreams at night,
    do they include me?
    Am I in your sleep my dear,
    do you think of me?

    As the night goes by,
    and the hours creep.
    Are there thoughts of you and I,
    and the love I keep?

    When the night is over,
    and the day begins.
    Am I still with you my dear,
    or does our love end?

    All throughout the day,
    as the time goes by,
    does your mind begin to wander,
    to thoughts of you and I?

    Now when the day is over,
    and the night begins.
    Do I invade your dreams again
    until the dawn begins?

    Am I just a dream my dear,
    are your thoughts of me,
    trapped inside your mind
    for only the night to see?

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    • Rookie Chhavi Anupam (7/30/2008 1:41:00 PM) Post reply

      Dear Greg, fantastic piece.....what an idea. I liked it immensely. Great! Chhavi Anupam

    • Rookie Chhavi Anupam (7/30/2008 1:40:00 PM) Post reply

      Dear Greg, fantastic piece.....what an idea. I liked it immensely. Great! Chhavi Anupam

  • Rookie Elizabeth Douglas (6/8/2008 9:00:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    I think that if there was a standard for writing poetry it would sound structured. Poetry is not trial and error. Poetry is trial after trial. No one can tell you if it's 'wrong'. Poetry comes from your heart@@

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    • Rookie Tulsi Hanumanthu (9/27/2008 3:07:00 AM) Post reply

      THE ANCIENT TREE OF POETRY (Shakespearan Sonnet) Deeply rooted trees can never be slain, Beheaded though they be by super-storms. With roots intact, the stumps will sprout again; Ere long, th ... more

  • Rookie - 4 Points Kyle Hamp (6/2/2008 12:47:00 AM) Post reply

    There's but one true way to write a real poem...and that's after a long day of living...a long day of mistakes...and a long day of love.

  • Rookie Csdb Kind (5/25/2008 2:20:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    There are no rules to writing poetry.
    Like no way to feel, and difference in sight.
    This world is small and blind..
    Find the inside.. the truth.
    What do you dream when you sleep?

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    • Rookie Bonnie Collins (6/20/2008 8:24:00 PM) Post reply

      I must agree, and if you remember your English correctly, Emily Dickinson had writtren many many love poems still considered to this day the finest, however when her writtings were discovered after he ... more

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