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Andrew Philips Male, 25, United States (3/18/2005 8:20:00 AM)

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First of all, a haiku doesn't have to contain a nature reference. It is a form of poetry like any other and can be on any subject.

And thanks for pointing out the past/present contradiction. To fix this problem and keep the poem exactly the same, here is my new draft:

A Stormy Day

Out of the window,
Looking up, I found hope in
Jubilant gray puffs.

I knew something was wrong, but I couldn't put my finger on it.

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  • Paul Slinski (5/16/2005 9:19:00 PM) Post reply

    That's better.

    You don't know what the kigo is? Ah well, doesn't matter. In North America we distort all traditions; tis the only way for art to survive and become more unique.

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