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jas Cagz jas Cagz Male, 49, United Kingdom (4/10/2012 12:38:00 PM)

[DARLING] I want to be with you when you walk the dog,

Check out rainbow's on a broken log,

I'm sad when you say I'm walking along the beach,

I hold out my hand but your out of reach,

When I hear your voice I close my eye's,

Pretend I'm there and shout surprize,

I want to smell you everyday,

Love and kiss you in everyway,

I'd hold you close and yes you know,

I'd never ever let you go.

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  • Robert Winthrop (5/6/2012 12:08:00 PM) Post reply

    Nice poem. However, check spelling " you're out of reach, " every way-two words, surprise with an s, hold you close and, yes, you know.

  • Ralph The Elf (4/22/2012 3:07:00 AM) Post reply

    if this is real then let her know
    you only lose if you don't show
    your love and care and for the maiden
    that makes you feel like a baby

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