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Rhythm and Rhyme Workshop


Workshop for poetry written in traditional forms.
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Garrett Richardson Male, 19, United States (8/8/2012 6:28:00 PM)

Please tell me what you think, and of ways to improve my poems. Thank You.

Song of Life-
My dependency on your resplendency
Has brought my once thought fiction
Into reality
Crowning you as my new addiction
Listen closely now to the steadfast sound
You have my heart pounding out loud
Do with it as you must
Only to you will I entrust
This muscle that allows you to behold my presence
For it is the living essence
Of my love to you my dearest
So as long as you can hear it
The day will never come
When our lustful feelings grow numb
Together our beating hearts compose the beat
To our song that remains unsung
We together can live our lives
And in the process form our paradise
Now with every step forward we take
We will begin to create
A song from our hearts
Filled only with the perfect words
The three words that ring true
More so than others do
I love you.

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  • Rookie - 12 Points Okoronkwo Jackson Jonathan (10/8/2012 2:34:00 PM) Post reply
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    Hali halo Mr Garrett. If I tell you that your poem is wonderful and great, hope you won't mind. Now do me a favor. Keep on writing and read more. Never allow these things to lack beside you; your dictionary, thesaurus, pen and paper. Nice one there

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