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Ernestine Northover Ernestine Northover Female, 71, United Kingdom (12/14/2005 3:50:00 PM)

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Well Jim, I don't think you have left anything out in this poem. A deeply thought out write, unusual rhyming using the end of each stanza. making a deep read here. Well written, leaving one with that unanswered question - perhaps he'll try some other planet, he's probably had enough of us already. Thanks for putting it on the forum. Love Ernestine XXX

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  • Jim Valero (12/14/2005 5:43:00 PM) Post reply

    Right! We don't seem to have quite carried out the job to 'tend the garden, ' as God entrusted our pre-lapsarian fore-fathers in Paradise. We should have listened to our Mother Earth more closely. Let's hope we're still in time to heed her call before She gets even angrier and takes more drastic measures as She has been doing lately!

    I'm glad you dug the read. Thank you for your comment.

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