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  • Adam M. Snow Rookie - 1st Stage (8/19/2014 10:29:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    So I refuse to change my style to modern, so sue me.. I prefer the classic styles, that's where I'm more comfortable at and there's nothing wrong with that.

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    • Jefferson Carter Rookie - 1st Stage (8/20/2014 10:44:00 AM) Post reply

      Adam, if you'd ever read anything ABOUT poetry, you'd realize what a silly statement this is. There is no " classic" style; there is pre-1960s formal poetry, which can only sound anachronis ... more

  • Jefferson Carter Rookie - 1st Stage (8/19/2014 4:08:00 PM) Post reply | Read 3 replies

    Prof. Plumb says this is Adam's best poem and Keats would be proud of him. It may be Adam's best poem, but I'd imagine Keats would read it and then run, screaming, for the nearest receptacle to vomit in. Just check out the goofiness of lines 2 (the OBSCURE of night) , (12 (in ways a lamb once lost dare can) ,21 (grant hands?to this lambie) ,20 (and help the ones encage be free) , and, my favorite,28 (all of You and Your loving heap) ! ! Adam, please stop writing and please start reading! ! !

    This Lost Lamb
    Written by Adam M. Snow

    Oh by the morning strike of day
    and by the calm obscure of night,
    my heart is Yours O God - I pray;
    grant this lost lamb Your holy sight.

    Give this lost lamb the sight to see,
    truth that lies in the love of Thee.
    Show me the world in Your own eyes
    and make O God, this dumb man wise.

    Grant this lost lamb the words to speak,
    the Word O God of Yours to man,
    the Word of truth for which they seek
    in ways a lamb once lost dare can.

    Grant this lost lamb an ear to hear,
    and hear Your voice so crystal clear.
    Speak Ye - O God with words of love,
    let this lamb hear Your voice above.

    Grant this lost lamb the feet to lead,
    so I may guide a crowd to Thee.
    Help this lamb O God to succeed,
    and help the ones encage be free.

    Grant this lost lamb the hands to aid,
    and help the fallen and afraid,
    and help the lost ones to be found.
    Help me guide them to solid ground.

    Lead this lost lamb - O God, to Thee;
    save this lamb from the sunless deep.
    Open my eyes so I could see,
    all of You and Your loving heap.

    Let this lost lamb be born again,
    to live for You - O God, Amen

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    • Mike Acker Rookie - 1st Stage (8/19/2014 10:32:00 PM) Post reply

      Lamont Palmer (8/19/2014 8: 13: 00 PM) Post reply Stage .......Thats his biggest (and I think, insurmountable) flaw. -LP It is really funny to see Palmer criticizing (poor) Adam's work. I thi ... more

    • Professor Plum Rookie - 1st Stage (8/19/2014 8:32:00 PM) Post reply

      I dig some of these lines. 'Your loving heap' is hysterical! Don't take it so seriously Carter. The kid's trying his a*s off.

    • Lamont Palmer Rookie - 1st Stage (8/19/2014 8:13:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

      I like Adam's sense of rhythm, but he writes like he's never read or been influenced at all by modern poetry. Thats his biggest (and I think, insurmountable) flaw. -LP

  • Mohammad Skati Veteran Poet - 3rd Stage (8/19/2014 3:00:00 PM) Post reply

    I'm going to look for the newest books of poetry and about poetry, so we can all discuss fully together. Thanks.

  • Black On Black Arts Rookie - 1st Stage (8/19/2014 8:31:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    hi please check out my new poems defining moment and kissing a fool rate and comment I will greatly appreciate the feedback

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    • Jefferson Carter Rookie - 1st Stage (8/19/2014 2:36:00 PM) Post reply

      Black, i read those 2 poems and didn't think much of them. All I can do is suggest you read lots of good contemporary poets before you put pen to paper again. They'll guide you, inspire you, and, wh ... more

  • Pranab K Chakraborty Freshman - 2nd Stage (8/19/2014 1:01:00 AM) Post reply

    As soon as I awake, begin a new book to read, open wide and no hesitate to mention that the book is That New Day which recommends my presence every time.

  • Jefferson Carter Rookie - 1st Stage (8/18/2014 8:23:00 PM) Post reply | Read 5 replies

    Poemhumpers, to get the taste of Adam's latest inept stab at poetry (" Bloody Lamb Poo" ;) out of my mouth and to help me forget Dan Reynold's a-little-better-but-still-goofy poem, I'm posting this excellent piece by Danez Smith. Whew-o, I feel a little better already!


    Not an Elegy for Mike Brown

    I am sick of writing this poem
    but bring the boy. his new name

    his same old body. ordinary, black
    dead thing. bring him & we will mourn
    until we forget what we are mourning

    & isn’t that what being black is about?
    not the joy of it, but the feeling

    you get when you are looking
    at your child, turn your head,
    then, poof, no more child.

    that feeling. that’s black.

    \
    think: once, a white girl

    was kidnapped & that’s the Trojan war.

    later, up the block, Troy got shot
    & that was Tuesday. are we not worthy

    of a city of ash?of 1000 ships
    launched because we are missed?

    always, something deserves to be burned.
    it’s never the right thing now a days.

    I demand a war to bring the dead boy back
    no matter what his name is this time.

    I at least demand a song. a song will do just fine.

    \
    look at what the lord has made.
    above Missouri, sweet smoke.

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    • Mike Acker Rookie - 1st Stage (8/20/2014 12:47:00 PM) Post reply

      JC, this is truly an excellent poem. It handles the issue at hand in an inspiringly fresh, new way.

    • Professor Plum Rookie - 1st Stage (8/19/2014 8:25:00 PM) Post reply

      Dudes, I'm just glad everyone's responding. It was getting boring around here. I like opinions.

    • Lamont Palmer Rookie - 1st Stage (8/19/2014 8:01:00 PM) Post reply

      My opinion of this poem is somewhere in between Plum and JC's. Is it a great poem?No. It flirts too much with sentimentality. But its an entertaining read, reminding me of the old free verse style of ... more

    • Gulsher John Rookie - 1st Stage (8/19/2014 7:46:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

      veritably a fine piece... ya it's Not ... more

    • Professor Plum Rookie - 1st Stage (8/19/2014 7:36:00 AM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

      A third grader could write a better poem ... more

  • Adam M. Snow Rookie - 1st Stage (8/18/2014 4:51:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    A poem from a lost lamb to God

    This Lost Lamb
    Written by Adam M. Snow

    Oh by the morning strike of day
    and by the calm obscure of night,
    my heart is Yours O God - I pray;
    grant this lost lamb Your holy sight.

    Give this lost lamb the sight to see,
    truth that lies in the love of Thee.
    Show me the world in Your own eyes
    and make O God, this dumb man wise.

    Grant this lost lamb the words to speak,
    the Word O God of Yours to man,
    the Word of truth for which they seek
    in ways a lamb once lost dare can.

    Grant this lost lamb an ear to hear,
    and hear Your voice so crystal clear.
    Speak Ye - O God with words of love,
    let this lamb hear Your voice above.

    Grant this lost lamb the feet to lead,
    so I may guide a crowd to Thee.
    Help this lamb O God to succeed,
    and help the ones encage be free.

    Grant this lost lamb the hands to aid,
    and help the fallen and afraid,
    and help the lost ones to be found.
    Help me guide them to solid ground.

    Lead this lost lamb - O God, to Thee;
    save this lamb from the sunless deep.
    Open my eyes so I could see,
    all of You and Your loving heap.

    Let this lost lamb be born again,
    to live for You - O God, Amen

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    • Peter Stavropoulos Rookie - 1st Stage (8/20/2014 8:05:00 AM) Post reply

      Hi Adam, as a Christian I like this poem. Obviously I agree with the sentiments. (P.S. you might want to replace " heap" in the third last line with some other word like " keep" , ... more

  • Gangadharan Nair Pulingat Veteran Poet - 3rd Stage (8/18/2014 10:35:00 AM) Post reply

    I likes to get the poems of Tomas transformer's great poems in poem hunter.com.if it is available for reading.

  • Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr Rookie - 1st Stage (8/18/2014 12:49:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    Echoes Breathe Deep {Traditional Rondeau Format} as a reply...still needs work, but what literary work doesn't in somebodies eyes or mind...Hope all had a great weekend...And thanks, Frank O on Thursdays post...much appreciated...FjR

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    • Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr Rookie - 1st Stage (8/18/2014 1:20:00 AM) Post reply

      Echoes breathe deep beneath church steeples, wind warped chimes chase spiral pathways down the aisles where caskets are incensed. Funerals tend to cumber grieving hearts and lungs from the cho ... more

  • Lorraine Margueritte Gasrel Black Freshman - 2nd Stage (8/17/2014 3:15:00 PM) Post reply

    For the Treasure Island game where do i find the weekly poetry topic and the surveys? i always recommend my friends on Facebook and other places to join PoemHunter, how do I get credit for that? I love to play games so i hope I get some answers..

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