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  • Gold Star - 15,473 Points Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr (1/8/2015 6:39:00 PM) Post reply | Read 2 replies
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    Souls In Sleep...

    Souls in sleep beneath morning's dew,
    felt the breeze of death through the willows,
    smelt the fetor of flowers wilting
    all over each other, on freshly dug sod;
    too soft to take knee and whisper
    unspoken words...now lost to regret.

    Shadows eclipse this yard of stone,
    sunfall breaks through naked branch,
    twilight casts arched silhouettes
    over rows of flaking granite;
    names and dates lose their stipple to the night.

    And who are these occupants sleeping
    deep beneath these hallowed squares?
    Were they collar blues, or Wall Street suits,
    common folk... or recherche?
    Doesen't matter here, where equality breathes.

    And if these occupants suddenly woke
    would they speak of a gated kingdom
    or a passage absent of grace.
    Ashes cannot speak or hear,
    still we'll talk to the ground,
    and wait for the wind
    to satisfy myths and hopes
    until someday we too
    will rest beneath mornings dew.


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    Sean North (1/8/2015 7: 10: 00 AM) Post reply
    thInk thErEs abOut enOugh comments nOw to send 2 SnOwDen.... dammmmm mR Frank... GO WeLL and remember were waching you...and commenting..peace 1st then the small stuff...later and best 4 ya 15 man


    The Pundit (1/6/2015 9: 16: 00 PM) Post reply
    dreamy, steamy, and a little creepy. Stipple and Smelt! ! Nice poem, Frank.

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    • Gold Star - 15,473 Points The Pundit (1/8/2015 10:23:00 PM) Post reply

      Frank, I like how the 'fetor' and 'flaking granite' mix it up with the sunset images. That dichotomy makes for exciting poetry.

    • Gold Star - 15,473 Points Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr (1/8/2015 6:43:00 PM) Post reply

      Yeah, I went and deleted my own post by accident...I know, I know....How long have I been on this site?Evidently TOO LONG! Thanks, Pundit and sEaN....A Happy & Healthy to you & yours...~FjR~

  • Freshman - 1,485 Points Mike Acker (1/4/2015 5:24:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    Depression

    I feel good today.
    I don't know why I should.
    Things have been bad,
    and good is not what
    I should be feeling.
    All I can think of is that
    the fruit smoothies,
    I have been making lately,
    are the reason.

    I have to stop
    making smoothies.

    Mike Acker

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  • Freshman - 1,049 Points Dan Reynolds (1/2/2015 7:37:00 AM) Post reply

    Happy New Year to all at PH. Lang may yer Lum reek.

  • Freshman - 1,815 Points Nishi Kumari (1/2/2015 6:58:00 AM) Post reply

    wishing all the members of PH a very happy and a wonderful new year 2015.....may heaven shower love and blessings to all of you....

  • Gold Star - 15,473 Points Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr (12/31/2014 10:31:00 PM) Post reply

    Here's wishing all PH'ers a very Happy, Healthy and Insperational 2 0 1 5...Rock-On! ~FjR~

  • Rookie - 397 Points ... Dog God 8hate (12/31/2014 5:49:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

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    . . . Your Party

    yes... (please observe!) ...
    i wish i could attend...
    alas! (a) strenuous distance
    forestalls, a disabling factor
    for a... disabled shoe?
    i wear boots! But contingent on
    where worn...

    i, execrated traveler, an
    impeded chattel...
    so subject... so imposed
    of they so imperious...
    they so masked in their
    invisible, non approachable
    lair... they, those stealthy,
    deceitful, but guileless...

    gods
    .
    .
    Al&i

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    • Rookie - 397 Points The Pundit (12/31/2014 8:10:00 PM) Post reply

      On your page it's 'The Party', and here it's 'Your Party'. Interesting difference in title names. 'Your' implies a poem or letter to a certain person, while 'The Party' might be directed towards ANY r ... more

  • Freshman - 1,006 Points Gulsher John (12/31/2014 12:11:00 PM) Post reply

    Ah what a cold misty NEW year night....0C almost
    wish u all PHers.
    john

  • Bronze Star - 5,477 Points Lorraine Margueritte Gasrel Black (12/31/2014 8:41:00 AM) Post reply

    Have a safe and HAPPY NEW YEAR! ! ! !

  • Rookie - 99 Points James Timothy Jarrett (12/30/2014 3:34:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    Leaving her

    I can’t bear the thought of leaving her
    My heart that races when I see her
    Stopped and still inside my chest
    My life’s blood
    That I would so gladly bleed for her
    Dead within my veins
    Casting off that cold corpse like a blanket
    And flying into the darkness
    Leaving her so alone
    A broken widow in this world
    Her soul mate flown
    Gone away without her
    I can’t bear the thought of leaving her
    Just going away
    Leaving her nothing
    But my cold flesh to cry on

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    • Rookie - 99 Points The Pundit (12/30/2014 10:14:00 PM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

      I like a lot of what I see here, but you have to get rid of the platitudes. 'bear the thought', 'heart racing', 'my cold flesh', etc. These are overused and should be avoided. 'Casting off....like ... more

  • Rookie - 397 Points ... Dog God 8hate (12/30/2014 9:23:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    Z
    z
    z

    SLEEP? What an extraordinary benefit ...
    and curiously diverse. In some, a very droll
    expression. I had 8 hours of sleep last
    in, uh, i think ...1987? When i had
    my last ... euphonic ... phone call.
    It's a similar fate with my FB wall.

    Why?

    i'd explain on THE ... but you'd titter
    and at a very (very) ... DROLL ...

    design ....


    ^..^

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    • Rookie - 397 Points Frank Ovid (12/31/2014 12:34:00 PM) Post reply

      Who but DG8 could present such an interesting (albeit brief) discourse on the mysteries of sleep?Nobody! Love this character Dog!

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