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Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr Male, 54, United States (7/10/2012 7:45:00 PM)

Of The Final Days'

winnowing at the notion of judgement
we ocularise with antithesis
like charlatans in lieu of antipathy
and all that which we've become
principal perpetrators, desecrators...
woeful menstruators of.

and shame on ourselves
though just mortal life we be
for learning how to sneer and bastardize
all we learned in childhood innocence;
so now what do we do, what can we say
when time decides to wash its hands of us?

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Jefferson Carter (7/10/2012 3: 18: 00 PM) Post reply
Frank, puleeze, puleeze, puhleeze learn how to use apostrophes! ! ! Your constant misuse of them is at first distracting and then, after the tenth error, irritating. I did manage to plow through them aND REACH THATB GREAT FINAL LINE. OH, WELL... YOU'RE STUBBORN, I KNOW.



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  • Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr (7/10/2012 11:18:00 PM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

    Well, hello, Mr. Carter.Truth be told, I am only perhaps 1/10 as stubborn in comparrison to your cancerous proclivity for hyperbole...That said...your point on my literaru faux-pas has been taken....yes, I do possess a brain-block on the rules of apostrophe, IE: possession, the A-mark sliding in before or after. So I googled up a wee bit of language arts 101 and I think I resolved the issue...FOR NOW...and I only say this because when it comes to anything, and I mean anything that I post and you read, that it's my strong bet that you would likely re-register as a Conservative with the 'Zona board of elections before commentIng on any work of mine that wasn't laced with sarcastic prattle, am I right...you know I am. Yet would you believe on returning here recently that I am actually happy to see your name, especially considering the fact that you left this site 4 years ago and have spentng the past 4 years logging back in to tell us so, but only after surfing peoples work, and blowing hot air from behind a screen at anyone who God forbid does not think, act and write as you...Would you PULEEEEZE lighten up before you stroke-out, and I lose a formidable battle-buddy and YOU not get the opportunity to cast your re-election vote for The Socialist! Come on, J.C.....give us a smile and a underbreath laugh...you've known me for 6 years for God sake....Lets be real here. You wouldn't keep doing what you do unless you loved every moment of the grandstand..... You Be Well, J.C...........FjR

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    • Jefferson Carter (7/15/2012 10:27:00 PM) Post reply

      Frank, you're a charming devil! ! You almost make me want to post here more often. I'm glad Lamont is here. He's a facebook pal, so I get to hear from him. Hope you're well and reading GODD contem ... more

    • Lamont Palmer (7/11/2012 10:17:00 AM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

      I was rather put off by the preachiness of the poem, and ending on a cliche, but I liked the structure and shape of it. Don't be so sensitive, Frank. There's no such thing as a perfect poem. Not even ... more

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