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..... W@king Up..... ..... W@king Up..... Female, 14, Armenia (6/14/2013 8:45:00 PM)

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I don't think this is too bad :) you write of an intriguing concept. Perhaps if you wrote more on this topic and had a rhyme scheme it would be better?But nice work :)

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  • Jefferson Carter (6/15/2013 10:51:00 AM) Post reply

    Good poems aren't about concepts or ideas; they're about words. This is clumsy and ungainly. A rhyme scheme makes sense here since it is a " song, " but no amount of formal scaffolding will cure the writer's basic lack of English fundamentals.

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