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Lamont Palmer Male, 52, United States (6/15/2013 4:55:00 PM)

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Artifact



For three years you lived in your house
just as it was before she died: your wedding
portrait on the mantel, her clothes hanging
in the closet, her hair still on the brush.
You have told me you gave it all away
then, sold the house, keeping only the confirmation
cross she wore, her name in cursive chased
on the gold underside, your ring in the same

box, those photographs you still avoid,
and the quilt you spread on your borrowed bed -
small things. Months after we met, you told me she had
made it, after we had slept already beneath its loft
and thinning, raveled pattern, as though beneath
her shadow, moving with us, that dark, that soft.

Claudia Emerson

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This is a fine contemporary poem, written with meter and freshness. One needn't throw the baby out with the bath water to have a modern sound. In my humblest opinion, if you want to write poems that will have a shot at lasting long after you're dead, lean toward the masters. -LP

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  • Rookie - 589 Points Jefferson Carter (6/15/2013 7:58:00 PM) Post reply
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    Monty, this is pretty good, nothing special about the catalogue of things but a clear movement line to line. I don't get a sense of meter. It's not very iambic-y.

  • Rookie - 324 Points Alice Vedral Rivera (6/15/2013 6:21:00 PM) Post reply

    Lamont, thanks for posting this poem by Claudia Emerson. I really enjoyed reading it.

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