Semantics. You're trying to tell someone about how you feel instead of showing them. If you want to 'tell' then write it in an essay. (Having said that, the best essays use some (at least) poetic language) Floundering poets never seem to understand the difference between telling and showing.... Talking to someone, or writing ABOUT SOMETHING. Emotions clog up the essence of a poem. Lose it, Man!
I'm going to give you an assignment for tonight. It's due tomorrow evening. Tell me a story, in some kind of poetic form, about something that happened to you. Anything. I want you to describe to me what happened to you. It doesn't matter what happened! YOU MAY NOT TELL ME WHAT YOU FELT WHEN IT HAPPENED. DESCRIBE THE INCIDENT LIKE IT WAS A PHOTOGRAPH OF THE SITUATION. NO FEELINGS ARE ALLOWED. JUST DESCRIPTIONS. THIS IS VERY IMPORTANT!
I'm serious. This is due at 8: 00 o'clock tomorrow night. After you post it we will discuss your assignment. I'll be here for you. Happy writing!