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Steven Ralph Steven Ralph Male, 44, United States (10/22/2013 4:03:00 PM)

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" Spew" and " stipple" are good in the poem. Keeps the " s" sounds moving up there in the 1st couple of stanzas. Those words reach out grab us. " spew of an incubus" is a little out of character with the rest of the poem, but let's face it, it IS a graveyard. Great Expectations anyone?I like " be" in there too for some reason. The poem is very austere (too much so?) and I think that " be" jerks it back down amongst us commoners. The " Be" be-fitting.

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  • Frank James Ryan Jr...fjr Rookie - 1st Stage (10/22/2013 7:05:00 PM) Post reply

    Thanks Scotty...Opinions and honest feedback are in many cases what enables mediocre verse to transform into good poetry, so long as the author keeps an open mind to the fact that almost any piece of literature can be improved on. John Donne(1625) , who wrote the poem " Death Be Not Proud" , one of his finest works from his publishing titled, " The Holy Sonnets. Donne, then an ordained Bishop, supposedly drafted this piece 101 times before releasing it for public scrutiny, which I also read was not exactly received by a cornucopia of poetic accolades!
    Cheers ~Frank~

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