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Portia Lane Female, 23, United States (6/1/2012 6:39:00 PM)

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I enjoyed this poem. The rhythm varied couplet to couplet. I don't know if that was intentional, but it may be a smoother read if keep the rhythm consistent. Even inconsistent consistency would work. If that makes any sense.

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  • Hawkins Rodgers (6/3/2012 10:23:00 AM) Post reply

    Yeah I get what you mean. I've been trying to get at that myself for a while. I want to go for the 'consistent inconsistency' that you mentioned but haven't quite found the words to do so. Thanks

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