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Jessie Knaggs United States (4/12/2013 8:09:00 AM)

Run

Run to the future
Run from your past
Run from your evil
Run from your pain
Run as fast as you can
Run till your cold heart starts to thaw
Run until the dark becomes light
Run until your scars start to heal
Run even though you can’t get away
You can’t run from the demons in your past
But still you run
Run to a new place
Run to a new life
Run right into my arms
Then you’ll never have to run again
I'll hold you till the pain is gone
Till you can open your eyes and see a new world
A brighter kinder world
Where the pain from your past will be gone
This is the world i want you to see
It is the world i dream for you and me

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  • Gabriel Denver (4/15/2013 5:26:00 AM) Post reply Stage

    Hi there,
    I loved that...wonderful, wonderful wonderful............................

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