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  • POEM: Investment brokers by Jim Norausky (3/2/2009 7:18:00 AM)

    I hear people in their 50s and 60s where I work saying that they will never be able to retire. But what happens if we get too ill to continue working? Supposedly that's what retirement was all about: You put in your long hours and then when your body begins to slow down, you can rest, take it easy, and enjoy the fruits of your labor. Apparently, that can no longer be taken for granted.

  • POEM: Graduation by Jim Norausky (3/1/2009 6:28:00 AM)

    Has a nice conversational tone to it. I like the line that suggest there's only enough resources to buy the cat food and not enough to afford the cat. Some of the rhymes are quite inventive and pleasing. As someone else mentioned, I personally would dropp the double-spacing. The short lines take us quickly through the poem to the poignant ending and the blank spaces seem to interfere with that. As an aside: I did the 'right' thing and got a BA and MA and would probably be making a better living had I gone to truck driving school or learned to fix septic tanks. :)

  • POEM: Fear of Your Nation by Martin Byrne (2/24/2009 9:35:00 AM)

    Scalding jeremiad of things to come if we continue to ignore our problems as a nation. It has been my experience that things cannot be just bad in order to shake us out of the passive mode and into the active one; things have to be REALLY bad.

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  • Sonny Rainshine (5/1/2006 12:19:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    Strictly speaking, a haiku is a three-line poem with the first line having 5 syllables, the second having 7, and the third having 5. Typically the subject is something about nature, such as the moon, a bird, a flower, etc., and/or a season of the year. Traditionally, they should not make a glaring 'statement', but the meaning should be subtle and sharp, zen-like. Most were originally written in Asian languages, esp. Japanese. Because English is so different from Japanese, with different stresses and often monosyllable words, many poets do not completely adhere to the 5/7/5 format, but usually do keep to the 3 lines. When you follow the formula, it's easy to create haiku, but creating a really good one can be very challenging-there's not a word to spare. Check the work of an ancient poet called Basho-I'm pretty sure you'll find samples of his poetry on the Internet. He's considered one of the masters of the genre. I hope this helps, Nibedita.

  • Sonny Rainshine (4/30/2006 10:34:00 AM) Post reply

    I stumbled across a fantastic book on writing haiku, if anyone is interested. It's by Joan Giroux and is called 'The Haiku Form.' It was published in 1974, so it may be hard to actually purchase it. I think it is the best book on the subject I've ever read and is concise but thorough. She points out, for one thing, that many Japanese readers of English haiku note that most of what they see in English are not really haiku, but rather senryu-same 17 syllables, same three lines as haiku, but containing a message or philosophical observation. Traditional haiku are not directly philosophical, but kind of like a painting or drawing. Giroux illustrates this by displaying 3 separate translations of the same Japanese haiku. In one:
    'Collecting all the rains of May, /How swiftly flows the Mogami! ', she points out that the word 'How' is a comment. You could even say that the exclamation point at the end of 'Mogami! ' is expressing an opinion. Anyway, it's a very interesting and helpful resource, I thought.

  • Sonny Rainshine (4/28/2006 1:35:00 PM) Post reply

    Congrats. Enjoy your awards ceremony and give 'em a great big smile.

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