The poem is well written; in it is an air of mystery and depth of feeling. It flows rhythmically.
Your bother because it matters. To you. To me. Easily relatable. Sad. True. Nice write!
it's very beautiful, it is important to dream.... it has excelent word flow.
Try o write from the heart. Write what you know about. Make it to where it makes sense in the real world but it also has a hidden meaning. Good luck