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  • (6/6/2012 3:14:00 PM)

    Great write. Keep it up.

  • (6/1/2012 7:14:00 PM)

    APPEARANCES can be deceptive. What a person is on the outside does not necessarily reveal what he is on the inside, deep in his heart. Humans tend to judge from outward appearance. Thankfully, Jehovah God looks beyond outward appearance.

    In a world that puts so much emphasis on external beauty, we can find comfort in knowing that Jehovah God is not swayed by outward appearance. It does not matter to him how tall you are or whether others see you as handsome or pretty. It is what you are inside, in your heart, that matters to Jehovah. Does knowing that move you to want to cultivate the kind of qualities that will make you beautiful in God’s eyes?

  • POEM: R.E.M....ORSE by Jake Deeds (6/1/2012 7:08:00 PM)

    Wow! I need a pendulum. (I have really bad insomnia...) I could really connect to this. part of what keeps me awake is remorse. The title is creative as well. I believe that's Rapid. Eye. Movement....ORSE or Remorse. Anyway, great read. Thanks for share.

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  • Portia Lane (6/1/2012 6:49:00 PM) Post reply

    Please read this poem and let me know what you think. I wanted to focus on alliteration... did I over do it??Any other comments/suggestions?

    A poet’s plight

    I have here my pen and pad
    And now I plan to prove my genius

    If I can only get this stupid pen to work

    I will use mesmerizing metaphors
    And beyond brilliant similes
    I will compare things never compared before
    I will give words new meanings

    If I can only get this stupid pen to work

    I will stitch my story one scene at a time
    Decoratively divulging distinct memories
    I will quaintly quilt what is on my mind
    Even reluctantly memorializing past misery

    If I can only get this stupid pen to work

    I will tell tales never told before
    In ways no one has ever heard before
    I will leave my listener wanting more
    Each stanza sending them through another door

    If I can only get this stupid pen to work

    I will cunningly construct a new poetic form
    Into which rhythm and rhyme will swarm
    Into which even prominent poets will storm
    For it will transcend traditional norms


    If I can only get this stupid pen to write!

    Ugh! I give up! !

    This is a despairing dilemma I have disdainfully endured
    A wicked war waged against me without forewarning

    This
    Is another example
    Of a Poet’s
    Plight

  • Portia Lane (6/1/2012 6:48:00 PM) Post reply

    Please read this poem and let me know what you think. I wanted to focus on alliteration... did I over do it??Any other comments/suggestions?

    A poet’s plight

    I have here my pen and pad
    And now I plan to prove my genius

    If I can only get this stupid pen to work

    I will use mesmerizing metaphors
    And beyond brilliant similes
    I will compare things never compared before
    I will give words new meanings

    If I can only get this stupid pen to work

    I will stitch my story one scene at a time
    Decoratively divulging distinct memories
    I will quaintly quilt what is on my mind
    Even reluctantly memorializing past misery

    If I can only get this stupid pen to work

    I will tell tales never told before
    In ways no one has ever heard before
    I will leave my listener wanting more
    Each stanza sending them through another door

    If I can only get this stupid pen to work

    I will cunningly construct a new poetic form
    Into which rhythm and rhyme will swarm
    Into which even prominent poets will storm
    For it will transcend traditional norms


    If I can only get this stupid pen to write!

    Ugh! I give up! !

    This is a despairing dilemma I have disdainfully endured
    A wicked war waged against me without forewarning

    This
    Is another example
    Of a Poet’s
    Plight

  • Portia Lane (6/1/2012 6:39:00 PM) Post reply | Read 1 reply

    I enjoyed this poem. The rhythm varied couplet to couplet. I don't know if that was intentional, but it may be a smoother read if keep the rhythm consistent. Even inconsistent consistency would work. If that makes any sense.

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