Like the way you present death like this. Also the thought put into it adds that extra 'umph' as I like to call it, to add that grabbing effect that catches the readers attention and gets them thinking.
Very obviously from the heart. I like the way you phrase this poem, and a very interesting set-up too with the couplets. Well done, keep up the good work
Very intriguing. It certainly sticks out from other poems I've read. Very deep and philosophical. I like it.