Connor Good write! It is very powerful and has a message I am still trying to understand. I like the metaphor. You have a great way with words! Pretty or not LET IT OUT! Takes people on a journey and can tell some can relate.
You are a very good young writer. Keep it up!
Indeed deep Connor. I much liked the imagery, and the longing for your words. Feels of helplessness, and submission. Don't give up!