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Bri Edwards
Bri Edwards redwood city / United States, Male, 67
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Bri Edwards's last comments on poems and poets

  • POEM: Where Did I go wrong by Poetic Lilly Emery (1/27/2015 3:05:00 PM)

    gee, yesterday i read and wrote a comment on Where Did I go wrong. then i lost the comment before submitting it. today i picked Lilly Emery instead of Poetic Lilly Emery [i think you are one and the same], and i could NOT find the poem! ok, now i've found the right spot! and here is the new comment:
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    WHERE DID I GO WRONG LILLY EMERY:

    favorite lines:
    You're [sic] words eating away at my mind
    My body started to go numb
    My heart was feeling a heat of rage

    you're quite a story teller or have had a terrible Saturday evening, OR BOTH!

    i like the use of My and You/You're [sic].
    i like the variation in the # of lines per stanza, as long as it serves the poem well, as i believe it does.
    i like your use of capital letters.
    i like the poem, and i'll send it to MyPoemList!

    thanks forr sharing! :) bri
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    i've added:
    yes, you could spend more time on proofreading and (maybe) make it 'easier' for me to read your poems; typos and english errors stop me when i find them. a lot of love and dark stuff in the poems i peeked at while trying t find the right place to put this comment. not my favorite subjects!

  • POEM: Why Wait? (A Poem On Blood Donation) by Rajesh Thankappan (1/27/2015 1:59:00 PM)

    strange? that i recently read a similar poem by Akhtar Jawad (who commented below) .
    Akhtar's poem:

    Blood Donation

    It does not affect your health,
    It does not affect your wealth,
    Twice a year every year,
    Or at least once a year,
    Donate your blood my dear,
    No fear, no fear, yes no fear,
    You'll see two wings with your arms,
    On your head a crown of charms,
    High very high in the blue sky,
    With the angels when you will fly,
    The sky will ask who this is,
    Earth will reply my son you kiss,
    He donates his blood and lives he saves,
    I give birth to both angels and the knaves.

    Akhtar Jawad
    Submitted: Friday, January 16,2015
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    after rereading A.J.'s poem, it occurred to me that some (most likely christians; i'm not one) would say jesus gave his blood to save both angels and knaves. i would rather save only angels; let the devil 'save' the knaves!

    i 'love' to donate blood, partly because i enjoy being around 'medical procedures and personnel (especially the 'girls') ', and partly because it is so easy (for me at least) to give so much, and it mostly just costs me some of my time (none of my money!) . i give every four months.

    my poem regarding blood 'donating' (2014) :

    Bloodmobile Blunder …… [BLOOD: donating? ; suspense? ; humor? ; MISTAKE; a little LONG]

    thanks for sharing. may every needle which pokes you be SHARP...... and on target! ! bri :)

  • POEM: The Question of the Metaphysical Squirrel by Eugene Levich (1/26/2015 12:36:00 AM)

    WHY DO HUMANS HAVE TO MAKE UP SUCH WORDS? ? ? ! .........metaphysical/metaphysics/chrysanthemum

    met·a·phys·ics
    ˌmedəˈfiziks/
    noun
    noun: metaphysics

    the branch of philosophy that deals with the first principles of things, including abstract concepts such as being, knowing, substance, cause, identity, time, and space.
    abstract theory or talk with no basis in reality.
    his concept of society as an organic entity is, for market liberals, simply metaphysics
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    well i disagree with:

    Whether the hunter circled the squirrel or not
    Makes no practical difference to life on earth.

    i say it DEPENDS ON SEVERAL ACTIONS/INACTIONS of the squirrel and/or the hunter, including these:

    the squirrel did or did not continue to call as the hunter circled the tree

    the hearing of the hunter was or was not able to tell from what direction and from about how far away the squirrel was calling

    the tree did or did not move at all during the movements of the hunter and/or squirrel

    the hunter could/could not have hit the squirrel (with a bullet) if the hunter had tried

    would the squirrel be affected practically if a bullet hit him/her?
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    as for the God issue, some would disagree with you. i wonder if S. zaynub Kamoonpuri ever got back to you on it.
    i was going to end this until i reread the ending about God etc. Whose answer shall we accept as the truth? ? ?
    if i were to discover the answer for myself, as in 'having an epiphany', and if i believed myself, then the answer would probably affect me 'quite a bit', although there would still be questions about God, god(s) , or lack of God/god(s) . and i might also end up in a loony bin if i tried to convince others of my answer(s) .

    bri :)

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Bri Edwards's comments on forums

  • Bri Edwards (9/20/2013 6:47:00 PM) Post reply | Read 2 replies

    can anyone tell me (please) how to find a poem (i know its name and author's name) which has been submitted to the contest now in progress
    on poemhunter, WITHOUT having to click through scores (hundreds?) of poem titles looking for it? i do not plan to enter a poem myself, but i've
    been asked to look at and vote on a friend's poem. THANKS. bri :)
    p.s. i found the poem once after minutes of clicking, but i accidentally clicked it away and could not figure out a way to go back to it.

  • Bri Edwards (5/20/2012 11:52:00 PM) Post reply

    Aditya, i really enjoyed the story and how you described the woman/girl. and suddenly she was gone! that is too bad if it really happened to you, but i liked the way you quickly changed the story from " glad" to " sad" . i do have some suggestions concerning your English, which overall i found to be excellent.
    line 2: " clam" i'm sure is meant to be " calm"
    line 7: dropp the word " the" . it's not needed.
    line 10: change it to " Stilled the world for a while."
    line 19: try " I now stand amid (or amidst) the crowded place."
    from Bri Edwards .......nice job ......8 or 9 out of ten, if you make my suggested changes

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