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Khoirun Niam (8/15/2008 11:58:00 AM)
hi, let me introduce mine
i am khoirun niam
from the paradise island indonesia
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Abby Koning (8/12/2008 10:10:00 PM)
May I be honest with you? I'm only saying these things because I want to help a fellow, aspiring poet. Maybe you should attempt to branch into other themes as well. It takes little talent to spew out words all relating to the same concepts. And I can see you in these poems. I don't want to see you. The poem should mask the poet, not the other way around. Finally, try to avoid cliches. Don't be afraid to experiment with new combination of words. Don't be afraid to pull out the old thesaurus if you need inspiration.
I think you should read 'Witnessing From Afar The New Escalation of Savage Power' by Denise Levertov. I think you would enjoy that poem. I'm going to post a link here since it is on on Poemhunter for some reason that is beyond me.
http: //books.google.com/books? id=B17l7tvmmgcC&pg=PA39&lpg=PA39&dq=denise+levertov+poetry+witnessing+from+afar+the+new+escalation+of+savage+power&source=web&ots=OxkdIkVYDZ&sig=iTLsxxz4LxbF6-CKOZOYZPDXIpo&hl=en&sa=X&oi=book_result&resnum=8&ct=result#PPA39, M1
Well, that is all I have for now. Usually I'd just leave you alone in this case, but you were number one on the popularity list, so I had to come have a look at your work before simply judging it negatively based solely on your username. Tally-ho! |
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