on the You tube, I put some very funny bits
they only accrued 150 hits
Brazillian Women
Wrestling In Oil
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Professional lyricist with songs recorded and released by B.B. King, Clarence Carter, Trade Martin, and other recording artists. In high school, voted most likely to be taken hostage in case of invasion by Canada.)
A Little More
when someone asks how I am
I know it’s out of politeness
most people would answer, “fine”
out of boredom and triteness
but I reveal my true state of mind
which may cause awkward social distress
for when I reply to “how I am”
this is what I express:
I am:
A little more jaded
a little more frustrated
a little more giving up hope
a little more at the end of my rope
a little more lost at each bend of the road
a little more despairing as each empty day enfolds
I can't seem to find the light at the tunnel's end
can't even remember when - the tunnel began to descend -
INTO HELL.....
don't know what the future will hold in store
but I do know, I just can't take -
even A LITTLE MORE! ! ! !
(The cure for the illness of a mislead society drowning in the sea of a false hope, diabolically manufactured by self-help gurus; syrupy, trite, inspirational speechmakers; and brain-washed 'positive' thinking pop psychologists) :
While your poems provide interesting perspective, their message seems to be trite with over use. This coupled with you poor wording leads me to belive that these poems provide no real insight at all, and are merely an echo of those that you percive as brilliant. Personaly, i belive that you need to develop your own voice as a writer.