Carmela Patterson

Rookie - 10 Points (10/26/40 / Los Angeles, CA)

' A Briney Sea ' - Poem by Carmela Patterson

I see the rolling waves undulating in the deep blue ocean,
I hear the gushing, the rushing and the turbulent motion;
While many of us are in the waters thrashing all about
Frighteningly and frantically, 'Save us! ' we shout.

Our vessel has sunk; we were tossed into the rough sea;
How could that upset have happened, how did it come to be?
Life boats filled to capacity, life rings clung to in a death-grip
Help comes, rescuers arrive to lift us onto another ship.

I taste the salty brine and choke on what I swallow;
I drift in and out of consciousness and helplessly wallow
In waters of oblivion, with others just like me ~ in that sea
Until I hear the sound of a bell ringing in the distance
Ringing and ringing with great persistance.
It snaps me out of that horrific situation;
I find blessed relief without hesitation.
A new day has dawned, and I stretch with a yawn.




© Mel Patterson,8-9-08


Comments about ' A Briney Sea ' by Carmela Patterson

  • Bronze Star - 2,822 Points Hans Vr (4/1/2012 11:53:00 PM)

    Dear Mel,

    I think this poem is very well written. A very nice description of a nightmare wth the big relief at the end. Even though I do not fully understand the title, I thoroughly enjoyed the poem (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, August 9, 2008



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