i never knew twas like this
this world this earth
this land of cries
ah! at my birth
what a sight i beheld
what a world i found myself in
so unlike the eden in the promise
i came with cries
albeit and i'll go with cries
i mourn my coming
you mourn my going
during my toil i cried
it came through pores in my skin
twas in my armpit
even from every part
i cried, oh! i cried
as i came to know
tis a world of cries i came
U really captured the imagry in this one i wanted to keep reading and in this poem u showed the truth and how u felt so well over all its a great poem! ^.^
Giacomo Leopardi wrote: 'The native day is fatal to everybody who was born'. It's true. I think sometimes man should remember it. However, sometimes one could forget it.
Nice work great thought... first two lines really impressing... as of my knowledge as a writter you really enjoyed while writing this words.. i can see this in your words..
came with cries albeit and i'll go with cries i mourn my coming you mourn my going during my toil i cried it came through pores in my skin twas in my armpit even from every part This is an expression of the sadness that is always in life - for some it is the knowledge that life is not for ever, but you tell us that life itself has too much pain. The two stanzas above are moving and largely true, but as Penny says, I hope you will find compensations. Your poem 'A name for my daughter' suggess to me that you already understand that very well. Keep up your good work, Hamid.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
waoh...bro u've got a beautiful style....loved the third stanza a lot- great diction and apt use of imagery...well done!