Broken. Poem by Neil Gray

Neil Gray

Neil Gray

Some hospital I think...can't remember...was very young at the time.

Broken.

Rating: 5.0


She say's we shouldn't sleep together anymore
but turns up on my doorstep at 3 am.
She say's she needs her space
but get's angry at me when I don't call.
She say's we should see other people
and throws a drink at me when I take someone else up on their offer.
She say's she dosen't love me anymore
then cries on the phone for hours about how she needs me.

I think she maybe broken.

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
~ Jon London ~ 30 May 2008

Yep, this is a familiar patten when it comes down to a woman's emotions Neil....If it truly is you that she wants...it'll work out in the end...but to be pushed away to be pulled back, is difficult and your emotions must be at breaking point due to confusion over what are meant to be mutual feelings.....great insight with this poem....nicely penned too... Thanks for sharing best wishes Jon

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Con Nie 08 April 2006

Hi Neil, I think this really describes the emotions women go through with their men at times. You don't want to be with them one day, but then you just have to be with them the next. Great insight into women.Good poem. Sincerely, Connie Webb

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Joseph Daly 07 April 2006

Neil this is a wonderful, there is a simplicity to it that is very disarming because it isn; t immediately apparent. I love the conclusion, it is very skillfully used and doesn't come over as an attempt as a lame joke. I think it adds pathos to it giving the whole piece context.

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