i love you with all my heart,
but we are still apart.
i want you by my side,
to help me hide.
the pain is overwheling,
the hurt is flaming.
why can't you be here,
and lend a ear?
is it the other girl?
or was it the beer?
you are gone,
i keep asking how?
love a powerful word...a tear and fear effect...you will make or take you...you must decide...you are still young...love...loving...cry...and cry some more...but learn..sweet little one...learn...very good write young person...
S, if you actually want to write a good poem, you ned to read good poetry. It's a simple fact; if nothing good's going in, nothing good can come out. Poetry is a craft as much as your feelings drooled across the page in rhyme. JC
i liked it alot! ! ^-^ blahaha lol to james' comment 'I did find it interesting that he complained about your spelling and gramatical errors when his post was full of them.'
Wow, I know it really sucks to feel like that. Sorry about your loss. Good poem though.
write from your heart, that's all that i have to say for your poetry is going to go a long, long way. GOD BLESS and put your mind to the test.
Well Steph I did enjoy it. ALthough Mr. Ryan (below) is correct you should check your spelling before posting (although I am rather quilty of it myself) I did find it interesting that he complained about your spelling and gramatical errors when his post was full of them. One point I would like to make read, read, read old poetry, new poetry good poetry and bad poetry. You need to understand the rules and structure of poems so you can bend and break them to fit your voice. Don't let people that don't understand or don't like what you write. Write to please yourself and if you do others will find it pleaseing. Ok I think I prattled on long enough JPM
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Did you mean: ' the pain is overwhelming'? That was a good try, keep it up!