Daybreak, Tofino Poem by John Beaton

Daybreak, Tofino

Rating: 5.0


The sand is of doeskin, the mizzle is bright
for the sun is a lamp above sleepwalking mist,
and the land intermingles with dimness—the night
still lingers, asleep on the rainforest's chest,
but is slipping away
in a luminous gray
from the hills and the headlands that hammock the bay
as its forehead is kissed
by the light.

Each wave is an indigo ripple on slate
which advances, glissando, a wraith from a wall
of nothingness, makes the expanse undulate
like the wandering remnant of some perfect squall,
then swells to a ledge
which is stropped to an edge
by the whet of the wind, and collapses to sledge
up the foreshore with all
of its freight.

In frothing white crescents they scallop the strand
with dazzling magnesium fire in the haar
and flare through the sea-fog until they have fanned
themselves out, then they ebb away leaving no scar
as the veils of gray clear
and the capes reappear
and, a ghost in the background, the form of a deer
manifests on the far
doeskin sand.

Friday, September 14, 2018
Topic(s) of this poem: beach,dawn ,waves
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
This poem came to me while jogging on beaches near Tofino early on a foggy morning.

The poem has three nine-line stanzas of my own devising.

Each opens with four lines rhymed abab. The meter is tetrameter (four beats) and mainly anapestic (da-da-DA)For instance, the first line reads: "the SAND is of DOEskin, the MIZZle is BRIGHT."

Then there are two rhymed lines, each with two beats, e.g. as the VEILS of grey CLEAR.

Next follows a five-beat line that rhymes with the previous two.

Each stanza then contracts to a close with a two-beat line and a one-beat line that echo and resolve the opening abab rhymes.

The poem has been previously published in "Eyes on BC" magazine and in "Better Than Starbucks" literary journal.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Susan Williams 19 September 2018

The sand is of doeskin, - - - -] from the hills and the headlands that hammock the bay- - -]Each wave is an indigo ripple on slate / which advances, glissando, - - -]n frothing white crescents they scallop the strand..... Beautiful unique images - -what a glorious write! ! ! 10+++++++++++++++++ on my fav list! ! !

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John Beaton 19 September 2018

Thanks very much, Susan. It's a joy to learn of others reading your poetry and liking it.

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