As well as what?
A little confusing, but that can be a good thing in a haiku.
The cold speaks for itself, but the body feels it too- -
Meaning the cold has affected everything visible (frost, etc) , but also the bones...maybe?
Is that close?
I like your haiku. I think it works.
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As well as what? A little confusing, but that can be a good thing in a haiku. The cold speaks for itself, but the body feels it too- - Meaning the cold has affected everything visible (frost, etc) , but also the bones...maybe? Is that close? I like your haiku. I think it works.