My heart aches, slowly breaking
My heart aches, sadness awaking
I feel unwanted, not pretty to you
I feel unwanted, a beauty untrue
For I wish, you loved me so
For I wish, it ended long ago
To save me from, this pain inside
To save me from, the tears I hide
This first love, burned so bright
This first love, now dark as night
The time has come, I am alone
The time has come, you're not my own
My heart aches, finally broken
My heart aches, words unspoken
I think you could have went farther into this. with all that you explained in your description, you could have added all that emotion to make the poem longer to truly get into description to really let it give a feel of your fears. Bad times will come and go, but the good times are the ones that show. :) Don't worry. The bad times are only temporary. More good will come to you in the future if you persevere.
Nothing hurts like a broken heart. Especially when you lose your first love. Beautifully painful. Thank you for sharing your injured love with us x.
Nothing hurts like a broken heart. Especially when you lose your first love. Beautifully painful. Thank you for sharing your injured love with us x.
Hey, i read your comment to come review this poem; hence i am here :) It's not a bad poem, the emotion of the speakr is expressed quite profoundly, yet there is this feel to it that lowers the whole poem iam not sure what it is, i think its the ryhme scheme maybe iam not sure: P, anyway, iam not much into romantic poems: P so i might be biased sorry haha
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Simple sentences that explain more than they speak aloud... This is a great poem...