Falling, Death, Love, Saved Poem by Star Crossed Lady

Falling, Death, Love, Saved

Rating: 4.5


Falling
Falling Fast
Flying
Pictures flying Past
Too fast Too fast
Can not take it all
The laughing as I fly Past
Laughing as I Fall

Shadows
Shadows surrounding Me
Eyes
Always there Always watching
Fun
They think its Funny
Fall That I'm always Falling

Done
I'm done for
Death
Right at deaths Door
Fade
Fading Away
Laid
Laid to rest Today

Hold
Voice yelling hold On
Dead
But I'm almost Gone
No
You're not Leaving
Please
Just hold onto Me

Don't
Don't do this
Lips
Feel a Kiss
Feel
I shouldn't feel Anything
Pain
The pain is Searing

Eyes
Blue ones looking at Me
Why
Why couldn't you let me Leave
Love
Because I love You
Tears
I say I love you Too

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Bri Edwards 15 February 2014

Fall That I'm always Falling i think you want 'un' in stead of 'all'. see what i mean? - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - very unique! plunging headlong and then BAM! You Are Stopped.............Cheated perhaps? what could lie ahead? ? ? more of the same? good grief. Let us hope NOT! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! it is almost a love poem; if it were, i would have to say i don't like it much. but i like it quite a bit, so it must NOT be a love poem! - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - SAVED? HMMMMM? my favorite lines? the whole first stanza: Falling Falling Fast Flying Pictures flying Past Too fast Too fast Can not take it all The laughing as I fly Past Laughing as I Fall ............... .......that, by itself, causes me to put this in MyPoemList. thanks for sharing. bri :)

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