Under the lamp
under the sodium
a yellow quick clasp
Well mate how does
-release not release
greeted then gone
-old wisdom - we wont-
round the corner
Who's giving it large
I was not giving it large
I was not giving it large
I was not giving it large
- a kids pleadom -
- ham fisted ham acted-
- loud voiced -
- rough voiced -
- scream shout woman -
- betrayed - undelayed - displayed -
- as expected -
- the black cardigan breasts -
- of gestured jabs -
- from fat shoulders -
- arms round open -
- flat hands -
- soap opera -
- learning -
- soap opera -
- questions -
He thin
- a puppet -
- thin cigarette held -
Spoke smoke
- into -
- leant to -
- into -
- a fractious haze -
- with friction -
Of social housing intensity
A street blood sport
I was not giving it large
I was not giving it large
Who said giving it large
I did not say you were giving it large
I did not say you were giving it large
The frenetic of forgetting
To smoke
To breathe
I was not giving it large
I did not say you were giving it large
-etc - by etc -etc - by etc...
I think some concepts within the poem escaped my grasp upon the first read. It feels like something you could read a hundred different times and get something different out of it every time you read it. It's extremely unique and abstract. Thank you for sharing.
I'm trying to send this via email but it won't let me! ! ! ! Poemhunter bastards! ! ............................ You'll get it. Keep trying! (In the mean time you're coming up with some really original stuff. No one is doing your type of stuff and that's great!) I'm working on one where I'm going to put the wrong word in places where you would least expect it. It's kind of a nonsense thing but it'll be fun to read. I'll send you some of it when I get it right. Right now it's just floating around in my head. S.
Oh Man! This is so freakin' good! ! I love it. Less is more Man! I love the repeats akin to Whitman. There's just so much I like. The smoking. The soap opera. This is an exquisite abstract painting that I want to hang in my living room! I'm flattered you gave me a nod as well. Thanks!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
i guess i'm not much into abstracts. but thanks for sharing. maybe something is lost on me due to me being a citizen of a breakaway colony? but i did read through most of your list of postings and they sounded very encouraging, though they are infrequently given out. encouraging to the other poets i mean. bri :)