because when you stormed out
with murder in your eyes,
stopped listening half way
to my list of
'reasons-i-should-hate-you' rant,
told me,
'I canna take this, lass, i'm out.'
Because when I chased you down the stairs,
you ran all the harder,
didn't look back, once, you pig,
and slammed the door
right onto my unsuspecting thumb.
Because when I peeked outside the window,
you were leaning against said door,
closed eyes, and all sagging shoulders,
I just wanted to say...
Listen, fool. I love you.
and, my thumb goddamn hurts.
This.... I like. It is a clever perspective to a petty arguement in which love prevails. I also like the humour. It is subtle and blends well to provide a hard and soft background. Very Enyable read Best Steve
this is good..the end made me laugh..im still laughin its just so true
OH yes LOVE hurts and gives a real pain in the.....a ten from me.
well balanced.....sad with a hint of laughter: D well done love and life hurt: P 10++
I concur with Karin, its Brilliant! ! ! and its life. Thank you for sharing of your talent, will be back :)
You say a lot with a few words. How much is lost in times of anger, but making up can be very satisfying. Hope you get your chance. Well done.
It is outstanding I love it. Lol it has very good humor and a lot of truths. I love the vivid arguement great discriptions!
Oh! God Charlie this is brilliant. It gave me a great chuckle and you explained the argument vividly admitting your love even so. Loved the ending too! 10 Karin Anderson
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
i like this poem..it let me laugh..very well done 10++++