I Was Warned Poem by Liam Hughes

It rings true in my ear as listen to the song............do you 'want' I in front of listen? otherwise, i'm not understanding it. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - your line: You pull the wool away from my tired sight..........does not match with the idiom i'm used to hearing about 'pulling wool' here is what i found online: pull the wool over somebody's eyes to deceive someone in order to prevent them from knowing what you are really doing Don't let insurance companies pull the wool over your eyes - ask for a list of all the hidden charges. See also: eye, pull, wool Cambridge Idioms Dictionary,2nd ed. Copyright © Cambridge University Press 2006. Reproduced with permission. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - Well done you've managed to bring me to the floor I was warned about this kind of war..................i would put a semicolon [; ] after Well done. and............it sounds less like a war and more like a 'one-sided' pummeling****! ! ! ! it seems you are no match for your adversary! **** pum·mel ˈpəməl/ verb verb: pummel; 3rd person present: pummels; past tense: pummelled; past participle: pummelled; gerund or present participle: pummelling; past tense: pummeled; past participle: pummeled; gerund or present participle: pummeling strike repeatedly, typically with the fists. Bob did not fight back for the fifteen minutes that the half-dozen men pummeled him synonyms: batter, pound, belabor, drub, beat; punch, strike, hit, thump, thrash, cold-cock; informal clobber, wallop, bash, whack, beat the living daylights out of, give someone a (good) hiding, belt, lay into, lam, bust, slug; literary smite you can't just freak out and start pummeling people North American informal criticize adversely. he has been pummeled by the reviewers Origin - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - i DO like the rhyming, but, as i've said to some other poets, i'd rather have a poem i understand better than one with rhyming which, though good rhyming, may cause the poet to be less successful in other areas of creativity. I'll get to more of your poems later. i often find myself editing my own poems quite a bit, including correcting 'silly typos', misspellings, etc. still i DO miss some of my 'goofs'! bri :)