The day she is not with me
Is the day I die
My life would not be complete
Without my very best friend
I know she'll always be there
Until the very end
I thanks her for all the joy
Praying to God she will always be my lucky star
Cassandra, erase the repetition in your 2nd line: ''is the day [is the day] I die'' Thanks for sharing greetings from Italy
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
That was very emotional, But that isn't enough :) You need to improve the rhythm. You also need to choose more cheerful words and avoid the repetition in your lines that will shine and glow your emotions that are expressed clearly here.. This time I will give you 7 and I'm sure I will give you 10 then :) Great work Cassandra for a little girl :)