Senseless Revisions Poem by Floyd Crenshaw

Senseless Revisions

Rating: 5.0


I am not a poet.
Just witness to this misplaced empathy of Our generation.
A tragic inability to identify with others.
A societal alien.
Idioms, customs and personal spheres; I offer
A thousand pardons for my unconscious
And unconventional inconvenience.
Please understand that I am still learning -

These days just go by,
And each night I try and try
To grasp it all in my time
To hold just what-footing
Continues to stay strong.
And each day I’ll just stroll along
With no one to be fooling
You know it’s a fine reason to be booing.

And it’s hard to maintain some semblance
When my thoughts remain alone
With no enabler to enhance them
Studied steps with no music to dance with.
Bemoan, bemoan, bemoan.

And I try to simplify
All the thoughts flowing in my mind
Where do you start?
How do you stop all that’s wrong
And turn it all around?

Take what enjoyment you can from every experience,
And take what you can from everyone
And give what you can to everyone.
Because soon enough it will all become old
Because soon enough you will become old

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Christine Austin Cole 20 May 2008

You know... people write all sorts of 'sad poems', mostly situational or event focused, and inevitably someone comes along to say it moved them or brought them to tears. Understandable, yes, but at the same time I wonder why posts like this don't draw more of a response, why more readers don't find posts like this utterly moving. What moves me are lines like your opening one here and the whole of your third stanza... this piece in its entirety, really. This is a 'tragedy' that comes from within- not an experience but the culmulative effect of a many of them - and it, by the way, in and of itself, disproves that opening line. Well done, poet - Christine

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David Desantis 16 April 2008

whoa, excellent. You really have a knack for bringing it all in at the end.....i know i keep saying this, but my favorite part was the very last line 'we will all become old'.....aint that the truth.....

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LOVEFOOL Aka 07 March 2008

You are a poet and a very good one at that

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