OH NO
Not again
Please no waterfall
(He with his hands to his head)
I’M SORRY
It’s just me
It’s nothing you’ve done
or have said
WHAT IS IT?
How can I fix it?
I didn’t break it
but how can I mend your head?
NO NEED TO
It’s not you
It’s just one part of
this foolish woman you wed
I HAVE TO
I need to
Your tears tell me
that something’s not right
NO REALLY
It’s just me
Sometimes tears
Mean that everything’s RIGHT
IT”S A MAN THING
To us tears mean
Something’s hurt you
One of our greatest fears
NOT FOR WOMEN
We aren’t like that
Sometimes we just need
This release of tears
OH HELL THEN
I’ll just feel useless
The mechanic
Deprived of his chance
IT’S OK DEAR
It’s just nature
We’re only doing
The Hunter-Gatherer Dance
I like the dialogue style, that you astutely employ here, Mary. Poetics has but one rule of thumb...and that be that there are NO RULES in Poetry! Your lyrical style is melodiously adroit, however, to be literarily diverse, and enable yourself to explore & master a vaster spectrum of poetic styles...is what architects ta true accomplished writer.True, thispiece may in fact strike a different chord from your usual repertoire, but in my literary world different is good, & creates opportunity to be better...And that in itself is good.Very Nicely done, Mary. ~ FjcR ~
Dear Mary imHo you forgot the music, the message is good but to reach the heart they need the music that was there before the words, IMHO. Love from David
Mary, this is an okay poem, IMO. It is appropriate for this website and for the folks who come here to get 'in touch with their feelings'. Keep writing...as the more we do, the better we get. 'Toodles.'
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
I like it. There is that touch of everyday drama that plays out in the background of life.