I am the maker,
The builder, the breaker,
The eagle-winged helper,
The speedy forsaker!
The lance and the lyre,
The water, the fire,
The tooth of oppression,
The lip of desire!
The snare and the wing,
They honey, the sting!
When you seek for me--look
For a different thing!
I, careless and gay,
Never mean what I say,
For my thoughts and my eyes
Look the opposite way!
Well written in a quatrain of four stanzas embellished in musical rhyme and rhythm. Sylva
This was just fun and delightful. I really enjoyed the pace and light heartedness
With well images and imageries desiring for being and to do, to reform, .... well penned
Many have brilliant ideas, but their eyes still lead them astray. MISERABLE!
the poem has nice rhyming, but makes little sense to me, therefore I call it a silly exercise in rhyming. : ) BUT it is NOT offensive, and the grammar seems ok. So *** 3 stars. bri : )
'forsake verb Definition of forsake as in to leave to cause to remain behind forsaking most of our possessions, we evacuated just before the hurricane struck' What does Elf forsake? ?
Perhaps you are 'careless' in not making clear what this 'Elf' is and what it does, thinks, means to do/not do.
It feels like the elf from ancient time fell into the poet's soul, evrything emerged from the elf's memory, mingled with the poet, felt by us. Ancient is the opposite of 'now', they exchanged perspectives through the river of time.