A Pledge For Deprivation Poem by nimal dunuhinga

A Pledge For Deprivation

Rating: 4.8


Desolated men in despair
and desperately they go with the wind
not knowing the exact direction; a flimsy veil covered
but you cannot see through.
A see-saw in a children park
but they cannot sit
as they are overweight.
Do they overstep?
Who makes a play ground for these overwhelming crowd?

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Joseph Daly 28 May 2006

A winner my friend. A wonderful piece structure in you inimitable style with a puch that feels like a kiss. This is a wonderful piece Nimal, portraying and quizzing the idea of change. Great piece my frind.

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Sandra Fowler 28 May 2006

The universal language of sorrow. How well you have defined that poverty of the human spirit that to some degree afflicts us all. You have spoken out very eloquently on behalf of these deprived people in your powerful poem. Ten from me, Nimal.

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kskdnj sajn 28 May 2006

Hi Nimal! A thoughtful poem that could apply to many circumstances, and loved the metaphor. :)

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kalubovila East, Sri Lanka
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