There are some moments
In every life
To decide or not
But on a sudden has to do
Aiming for success
Getting worse on and on
Some thing special happened
Surprised or Shocked
Sweet or Bitter
Is it true or accidental
In all honesty, the fourth line is confusing; but the story it told is good. I understand it has one who has obtained success in a moment in time, but even being successful in that given moment of opportunity, it tormented or was such a sudden change in their life that they feel culture shock of that fame. Being the moment in the given opportunity is ok, but you must be rooted in knowing who you are as a person before claiming success, or that success can take you. I enjoyed reading it.
This needs some work, Rohan. I know that you're trying very hard to express yourself, and I applaud that effort, but if you want to write English poetry, I think you'll need to work on your grammar and usage a bit. Just to pick an example, 'Be some moments, ' is probably not what you mean. I think you are trying to say 'There are some moments / in every life, ' etc. Please don't take offense. I speak and write only one language, and knowing a little bit about where you are I wouldn't be surprised if you are working with two or three, if not more. Keep writing. You might try some prose, if you haven't already, to sort of 'tune up' your grammar and all. I wish you well.
I like this. Its a little rought but overall a very nice effort. I am humbled that you ask me to read your work. I will read your other poems and try to be as honest as i can
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
This happens sometime to everyone. Good.