Bull Hawking


before both of us can feel....part 1


I should have been afraid
afraid of loosing you
utopia was a topic
but my trop-ics were too few

I should have been afraid
afraid of loosing you
but I never really owned you
never kept you on my pen

you were only ever there
only in my mind
nothing ever happened
but what happened in my mind

If I could have only kept you
kept you as my friend
I wouldn't be like gold ore
gold you never mined

If our troth had only
lived in truth

Submitted: Sunday, August 24, 2014

Topic of this poem: afterlife


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  • Freshman - 1,399 Points Bull Hawking (12/24/2014 7:28:00 PM)

    Part 2.....is under the title.....if only truth was simple....

    Glad you liked it.....you are never boring. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 12,261 Points Mandolyn ... (12/24/2014 4:55:00 PM)

    man, august 24th mandolyn was so boring.
    the gold mine line is a gold mine.


    i often feel the afterlife is after me and there are times
    i say
    Giddy up! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 1,399 Points Bull Hawking (8/24/2014 4:14:00 PM)

    lol..you are right about the spelling of loosing but I misspell words for effect....it is a vocal clue to lengthen the vowel I am offending. in the end I meant if only our troth had lived in truth....troth....being an antiquated word meaning....loyal or pledged faithfulness. Thanks for your comment. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 12,261 Points Mandolyn ... (8/24/2014 3:42:00 PM)

    It's losing. Drop the extra o.
    Great title and I love the ending... But did you mean truth lived in truth? (Report) Reply

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