Mark Stone

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Betrayal - Poem by Mark Stone

Offer your excitable tears
and sing your empty words
Have you no fear I know your secret?

The innocent child inside
is long since dead
Don't even think
that I am unaware.

Standing empty heaving with desperate desire
To free myself of your disgrace

Tears of shame and swollen eyes
You stare at the wreck that you have inspired.

I shell scream of growing pains
as bodies swell and their stench
begins to fill the air around me.
Is this your solution?

Tortured souls and shattered dreams
Their hopes petrified in broken graves
Is this my future?

My teeth are bared as I exclaim
I will not be apart of your delusion.

How well do you sleep at night?

Comments about Betrayal by Mark Stone

  • Rookie Mark Stone (12/19/2006 9:55:00 PM)

    Daniel, you are right created was to obvious.
    Thank you for your suggestion.
    I am glad you like it.
    Your comments are encouraging.
    Thank you.
    Sincerely Stone. (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie Daniel Tyler (12/19/2006 3:41:00 PM)

    I really like this poem, Mark. If there was a part I'd change it would be 'have created.' I think it's a little too obvious perhaps go for 'you have sculpted' or 'you inspired'. Aside from that, I think it's great, the language is really well chosen and it stabs with emotion. (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Tahnee ? ? ? (12/18/2006 12:02:00 PM)

    i like what you have written so far. let me know when it's finished. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, December 18, 2006

Poem Edited: Saturday, December 11, 2010

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