I see you,
Coming toward the car,
-My stomach flops.
I play it off as nothing,
As if youre not there,
-My heart cries.
I see you in church,
And you look happy,
-A smile forms.
You leave for a minute,
You look unhappy,
-My heart sinks.
After church,
You pull me off to the side,
-My body freezes.
You tell me you still want to talk,
And you ask for a hug,
-I jump at the chance.
Things seem normal again,
Like nothing ever happened,
-Im the happiest I've been in weeks.
But then I remember,
Remember her,
-My stomach flops.
I liked this - I would capitalize all the 'I's that refer to you. I would put a space after the dashes, but that's fairly subjective. Lastly, you need an apostrophe toward the end, I think in the word 'Ive'. Good one. Jeff
This is very good and the single lines are very effective - well done
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
The word that needs the apostrophe is 'Im'.