Crowded Bus Poem by jerry hughes

A wonderful 'slice of life' moment - you've captured this brief exchange between two people and revealed much in very few words - dialogue, description and narrative all in 15 lines - clever stuff Jerry! Justine

Brilliant Jerry as always. Like Karin said I could actually start to smell soemthing...lol Nice one mate keep em up. Going for a shower now i think. Best Regards Jerry mate. Craig.

Politeness! ! ! Try find that on a public bus in the dead of Aussie summer... or on a crammed London tube! ! .. It exists.. but in small amounts... I dearly hope this was inspired by a real event of a woman that knows what she likes and what others don't.. gives me hope for packed public transport.. Wonderfully written, comical and provoking, greatly enjoyed :) take care, Mel xx

Aren't you from 'down under' where that rock group sang the song with the lyric, 'You make me sweat'? (Laughing)

Very funny provocative piece of poetry Jerry! Very thought provoking and just full of imagery! LOL....I am sure you put a smile on everyones face reading this mostly cuz you don't expect the outcome or the poem to go that way for that matter... Great job Jerry.I look forward to reading more of your work soon...and I pray I never have the same experience on a bus...((Smile)) too funny. Keep up the great work................ =Shelley=

I love this piece - and the unshaven armpits and the pheromones flying and the hinted at sexual conclusion. Not a word wasted. love, Allie xxxx