Colleen Courtney

Rookie - 45 Points (10/13/65 / Massachusetts)

Dream Within A Dream - Poem by Colleen Courtney

I opened the door in answer to a knock
And seeing who stood there
Gave me quite a shock
For there stood a fairy
Looking sad and forlorn
Her appearance was dirty
Disheveled and worn
Her shoes were all dusty
Her hair a tangled mess
She had knots in her ribbons
And rips in her dress
Her face was brown smudged
Her lips cracked and dry
Her wings were so tattered
She no doubt could not fly.

I welcomed her in
And we sat down for tea
This bedraggled little sprite
And still in shock me
I asked her to tell me
The tale of her plight
She looked at me sadly
Tears made her eyes bright
As she told me a story
Of swords, lords and knights.

Her beloved handsome Prince
Whom she loved with all breath
Had been wounded lay bleeding
So very near death
Hunched over his body
While shouting to the skies
He grasped her hand tightly
Gazed into her eyes
He managed to whisper
With last dying breath
Please go on without me
In life find the best.

As she finished her story
I awoke with a start
To a knock on my door
And I felt my heart stop
I snuck to the window
And gave out a peek
On the porch stood a unicorn
With an ice cream cone horn...

Topic(s) of this poem: fantasy

Poet's Notes about The Poem

I started out trying for something whimsical which I have never attempted before, but as I got going I was led in a totally different direction. So whether for good or ill
this is what emerged. It ended up being one of those where the premise of it is that you think you've awoken from a dream only to realize in your dream that you're still dreaming.
Jeez, I hate when this happens! ! !

Comments about Dream Within A Dream by Colleen Courtney

  • Rookie - 379 Points Tyrone Gayle (9/18/2014 9:59:00 PM)

    Wow, poems like these remind me why I fell in love with poetry. You ignited my fascination with this troubled fairy then left me suddenly in suspense as you transcended into another dream. Your manipulation of words was magical. (Report) Reply

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  • Rookie - 274 Points Words' Knight (8/26/2014 7:30:00 AM)

    Your precise description of the girl absorbed me into a dream. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 15,333 Points Bri Edwards (8/2/2014 3:49:00 PM)

    you already have SO MANY comments! maybe you don't NEED another? but i guess i'll give ya one anyway. but first i had to be sure one of mine was not already submitted; ...not! NOW i suppose i'll have to read the poem, though after perusing the comments, i could probably come up with some passable comment WITHOUT reading the poem. i feel like i'm in a dream already. :) [ i actually had read the first stanza before writing what preceded this sentence, and it DID sound somewhat familiar. maybe you wrote something similar and i read IT? hmmm? ]

    ice cream cone horn... my favorite part...........was there ice cream dripping into its eyes? ?

    great rhyming! but i liked how you felt free (apparently) to vary the rhyme pattern towards the ending.

    in the last stanza, start/stop was at least as rewarding as a rhyme pair. and unicorn/horn, though perhaps predictable, was nice, especially with the ice cream reference. thanks for sharing. :) bri (ok, to MyPoemList) (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,381 Points Saadat Tahir (7/28/2014 6:40:00 PM)

    hahaha.... lovely
    quite an unexpected turn....your unicorn appeared out of nowhere and with the desired effect... and a cone!
    your notes make it clearer... whimsical but fun. Even if it was your first passed way ahead.
    I was drawn to the poem by the topic, since i too have a poem of the same name like the old master E E Poe...
    Your poem is far from the darker shades that Poe wrote, which makes it even more unexpected.
    but bravo, you did a great job

    v nice

    liked (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 9,262 Points Geetha Jayakumar (7/1/2014 10:24:00 AM)

    Beautiful poem Colleen. Your poem is quiet interesting and it caught my attention till i finished reading the last line...Loved it. (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 4,545 Points Valerie Dohren (6/26/2014 1:07:00 PM)

    Very novel write Colleen, and quite a fascinating little story. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,556 Points Jasbir Chatterjee (6/24/2014 3:07:00 AM)

    nice poem...I was touched...dream within a dream...lovely title... (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 3,556 Points Jasbir Chatterjee (6/24/2014 3:06:00 AM)

    nice write, very touching, really... (Report) Reply

  • Rookie Sohan Prasad Sharma (6/22/2014 11:53:00 PM)

    Nicely knitted and i enjoyed it because there is always a suspence and that gets open when the dream breaks. I m also sometimes walking in some street away in the unknown land that has a name in the dream and when out of dream i find my on the bed and realize that the street in the dream resembles the one in my country. The things that we see, read and imagine only comes in the dream! (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 542 Points Niamat Ali Murtazai (6/18/2014 4:57:00 AM)

    A romantic poem really (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,396 Points Louis Rams (6/17/2014 7:40:00 PM)

    a dream in a dream was like walking on air
    and was something i'm glad you did share.
    a ten (Report) Reply

  • Rookie - 17 Points Ozioma Anieto (6/17/2014 4:12:00 PM)

    Some poems create life as it is, this piece showed a lady's amorous desire - a handsome prince; Life dark side - love lost, the dead of Prince Handsome; and reality - life goes on after Handsome. This is nothing but the real side of life. You exposed life. Love this work (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 585 Points Silvi Tripathy (6/16/2014 11:08:00 PM)

    In life find the best.
    May be this is the moral of your fantastic poem what I found. Thanks (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 46,241 Points Edward Kofi Louis (6/16/2014 4:01:00 PM)

    A nice piece of work; in a different direction. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

    E.K.L. (Report) Reply

  • Veteran Poet - 1,011 Points Paul Butters (6/16/2014 1:38:00 PM)

    Dreams within dreams. Lovely thought. They do exist and can be baffling. Well told story. (Report) Reply

  • Silver Star - 4,380 Points Clarence Prince (6/10/2014 10:08:00 AM)

    very interesting, it sounds more like a short story, but in style of a poem! Thanks for sharing, Colleen! (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,723 Points Stephen Katona (6/10/2014 9:58:00 AM)

    My daughters loved this poem. They were captivated, and both smiled and laughed at the second dream within a dream at the end. My youngest was so enthusiastic about the 'dream within the dream' idea she started drawing the dreams on her hand. A roller coaster ride of emotion, delightful, then sad, then funny. 'In life find the best' - a powerful message for child and adult alike. (Report) Reply

  • Bronze Star - 2,723 Points Stephen Katona (6/9/2014 10:34:00 PM)

    This poem is incredible. I was captivated immediately. It took me on an effortless journey. Wow! (Report) Reply

  • Gold Star - 7,812 Points Francis Lynch (6/9/2014 9:08:00 AM)

    Whimsical and near superior. I agree with Lalitha, the ending is anti-climatic. Imagery is superior and a good theme regarding expectations and reality. (Report) Reply

  • Freshman - 719 Points Lalitha iyer (6/8/2014 10:22:00 AM)

    end was disappointing....................the flow was quite beautiful and rich with poetic rhythm............. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, March 18, 2014

Poem Edited: Wednesday, March 19, 2014

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